| "shiver me timbers" Reviews/Comments [ 22 ] |
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Reviewed By: anime RuLeS u all [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2007 22:36 CDT
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nice job! i love it so far, i think how its based around pirates & stuff is so cool! cant wait for u 2 continue!
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Reviewed By: miley On: April 08, 2007 14:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i liked it.mean cliffy.so are they gonna become best friends?please update soon.luck.bye.
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Reviewed By: This Sayuri-Sama [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2007 03:56 CDT
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OMG!!!!! I loved it!! This is a toatally awsome story line!!! I love the whole practicing to be a pirate thing!!! I wonder what 'real' training is!!!! I can't wait so please hurry and update I'll be waiting and watching!^.^
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Reviewed By: Icywolfflame [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2007 16:52 CDT
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its sango isnt it?hmmm.......Id be awesome if it was and then they became Pirates together or sumfin...
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Reviewed By: Tweak [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2007 14:53 CDT
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i cant bellieve ur making us wait to find out who the girl is. thats not fair! but its Sango isn't it? update soon.
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Reviewed By: miley On: April 04, 2007 12:48 CDT
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im gueesing rin is the girl am i right?
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Reviewed By: ~Sadie~ On: April 04, 2007 07:45 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey I love the story, but I hate the format it's in :P, also sometimes I cannot tell who's talking. Other than all that I love it keep up the good work!!
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Reviewed By: anonomousangel On: March 26, 2007 12:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You left the third chapter at a bit of a cliff hanger but it wasn't so bad like some I've read where someone gets shot and then the chapter's over. I think you took my advice and I think you did a good job editing.I wonder though what kind of training kagome's getting from the old pirate, if you feel like it may help to put that in as a bit of a filler, just to add a bit more length, you know. Parts of it almost make you want to slap some sence into Kagome's mom because she seems to neglect her more the a little bit. I can't wait to see how kag's grown up though and I think you should put some detail into that part once you get to it, when ever you decide to. I was just wondering, are you planing on making kag's a captain of her own ship and if you are I think sango would make a good first mate and Shippo could make a descent cabin boy. Thats something alot of people forget, a cabin boy but every pirate ship has to have one.(well dosent HAVE to but most I've heard of do and they usually share a cabin with the captain with a hamock set up somewhere)You have alot of good ideas and if you ever get stuck I could probobly help you out, if you ever need it, but I don't think you will. Keep up the good work. CHELLY ( anonomous_twin-angel@hotmail.com is my email if you want it.)
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Reviewed By: miley On: March 25, 2007 20:19 CDT
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was good.write more.
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Reviewed By: wolfsister On: March 24, 2007 08:18 CDT
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Please you have to update this it is such a good story and i can't wait to read the rest of it so update really soon PLEASE!!!!!!!!
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Title: lady kiki
Reviewed By: lady sayuri [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2007 12:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please please please please pleeeeeeeeease update again. i really really enjoyed reading the first chapters...so pretty please...update soon, thanks Lady kiki
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Reviewed By: miley On: March 12, 2007 22:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great story.very original.keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: Tweak [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2007 04:57 CDT
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YOu should keep writing. i cant wait till kagome meets the pirate(inuyasha right? or is this a sess/kag story? did u put that at the beggining and i missed it? cuz i do that ALOT.lol) this is a good story. i love pirate storys! they r so fun! pleeeeeeeeeeeaaaasssssseeeeeeee update again!!!
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Reviewed By: anonomousangle On: March 11, 2007 14:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's a descent start, I think you could make it a little bit longer, such as explaining how they look, where they are, or perhaps a little bit of histery stating something like "They were at it again, Kagome's sister had called her names and started another fight between the two of them." (I think you called her sister Kikio but I don't remember)Perhaps a bit of a lead into would work in that area like her sister finding her singing again on the balcony or something. It is a very good idea and I think you can go far with it but you just need to expand a bit. Don't be afraid and don't hold back because I think you could make this story fly. Chelly
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Reviewed By: foreverremember66 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2007 16:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Very good story, although there are a few spelling errors, you should continue.
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