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| "Breathe Again" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Resilience [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2009 16:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
you need to reread you fics and make sure there aren't so many run-on sentences. chapters need to be much longer, and mroe descriptive. it would be helpful, also, if, when you are switching from one person's scene (ex. Iroh and the Dai Li confrontation in the beginning chapters run right into Zuko, Katara, and Azula's confrontation) to another's. it gets very confusing when they aren't separated. the story is moving way way to fast, slow it down a bit and capture your reader's attention with more description, length, action, dialogue, basically everything i said before. Katara went a little out fo character in the Bath scene and teh Smut, try to keep her in character. mmm....i think thats it. I know i sounds like i didn't like this fic, but its not true. I enjoyed reading it, those were just some things i think you need to work on to make this better. continue writing, but don't rush teh sequence of events. this is a good fic. i laughed a lot, and for your first fic it went relatively well.
| Title: really good =D
Reviewed By: LuvYoukai [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2008 01:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just stumbled upon this fic and I have to say: It's really good!!I understand if you don't want to continue but if you do, please let me know something!Me and my sister really love your story!We like your writingstyle, the romance between katara en zuko isn't rushed like in many other fics and there's a good storyline. I actually haven't found anything disturbing. =) After I've written this review I'll see if you have other fanfics ;) -Aurélie (aka luvyoukai) and Héloïse
| Reviewed By: SeriouslyGir [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2007 19:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I can't wait until the next chapter!
| Title: good =3
Reviewed By: Quimera-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2007 06:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fanfiction sure has caught my attention, the way you write the story sure shows very interesting developments =) but theres only a thing i dont agree much...their feelings evolve too quickly ^^;;;on other fanfition "Love is Kaleidoscopic", here on mediaminer, the way that their relationship grows is much more real sweet slow and paxionate =3 anyway, wanna read the next chapter! =D hope we have more bonus chapters ;3 *giggle*
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