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| "Crack Syndrome" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: review..FINALLY
Reviewed By: andrea621 On: October 27, 2007 22:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
WELL what can i say. it was incredibly fun to read first of all. the dream was awesome!! i remember that conversation too ^ ^! your grammer and spelling have improve alot and you have full(er) sentences. i was able to keep up even with the fight sequences--does moved along a really fast pace. That was awesome--i saw real improvement in the fights. jim was in credibly funny but to have Naoto and Danny interact like that--i could so totally see that happening ^ ^. OH. and Reizal (did i spell dat rite 0.o) i like the name.... did you borrow it from Angel Sanctury?? either way, you did real good with this one. i hope this review was long enough. ._.
| Title: review...duh
Reviewed By: ninakitsune214 aka andrea On: June 13, 2007 23:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well i LOL'd a whole bunch of times throughout da chapter and the fighting scenes were very discriptive. Though i understood wat u were saying some of da spanish/spanglish on danny's part was in need of clarification on the reader's behalf since not evry1 understamds da puerto rican dialect of spanglish....like for instance "...quemadura en el fuego.." i think dat this is either a typo or danny was still delusional and if dats da case well then plz ignore. overall i pretty much enjoyed it and had great fun...i can actually see a plot beginning to form. Hentai for u!! ^-^.
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