| "A forgotten past and a tragic present(kagome returns)" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: Punkrock_grl92(Not Signed In) On: April 08, 2007 22:08 CDT
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Hey, it's me!! I have some advise!! Instead of having one big block of words, I think you should space out the paragraphs more. Having all the words in one big paragraph makes it hard on people to read it. I think that if you space it out, it would make it easier on people to read. Also, it would help if maybe you had a friend that could look over the chapters and correct your mistakes. A lot of people are picky about stuff like that.. I honestly think doing this would attract more readers and more people might review if you do. Your great at writting, but the spelling and grammer distracts the readers and takes away from the story!! I just thought I'd give you something useful this time.. I think this will help you out a lot!!
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Reviewed By: miley On: April 07, 2007 17:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great story.was short n sad.but cant wait for the sequel.hope it has a happy ending.ill read it.im givin you a 8.wish ya luck bye.
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Reviewed By: shipporinKIMS11 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2007 10:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great job, i really like this story. you have talent in this fanfic and in all your other poems and stories too! you join my favorited author group along with Punkrock grl92 and Tweak. u r right about punkrock grl92 stories, they r great. Keep writing! - #1 fan
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Reviewed By: This Sayuri-Sama [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2007 03:33 CDT
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Wow! That was really really good! It was also sad! I loved it!
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Reviewed By: Punkrock_grl92 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2007 22:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yup, me again!! Just wanted to say that I can't wait to read more. I also realised that you're taking after me with the "I'm not giving this story up." That's good cause I think that more writers should have that attitude instead of "I need 'this many' reviews before my next update." So annoying!! And beware if you're one of those people I'll haunt you in your sleep!! O.O Anyway, great job and keep going!!
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Title: write more
Reviewed By: sufferingkagome [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2007 21:28 CDT
Comment/Review:
write more
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Reviewed By: werxa [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2007 03:02 CDT
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wow, starts great, can't wait for next chapter, oh and its KIRARA - and the spelling of it is KILALA (I think :P)
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Reviewed By: InusBasket [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2007 00:27 CDT
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Nice story! The cats name is Kirara ( I know, weird spelling) update soon please!
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