| "The Pure Miko" Reviews/Comments [ 109 ] |
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Title: Just a review sweetheart
Reviewed By: Casus Belli On: April 01, 2007 22:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Mkay hun, here's the deal (for me at least). I love your story, I really do. You have great character develpment, and a pretty good plot. I just have one major problem that causes me to twitch. You have a bad habbit of starting off multiple sentences with the same pronoun. Try switching it up a bit. Throw in a name, or find a different way to start the sentence. It can get kinda annoying after a while. A nice way to avoid this for you would be to combine some of your sentences. You have a lot of sentences that themsleves are rather bland, especially when describing a routine or setting. For example, when describing Kagome's bathroom, it's mildly difficult to read b/c it becomes so repetitive. Try combining some of those sentences, it will make it flow better, especially when their all on the same topic, such as the shower curtain. Other than that, I really do like it, so I do hope you continue to write it. Lots of love from above chica, Casus Belli, the one and only
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Reviewed By: animeboysrock23 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2007 20:43 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please continue
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Reviewed By: SISTERINLAW19 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2007 02:01 CDT
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Well that was interesting.....Ilike your story and I hope you continue it.And yes I know that this is a lame review.
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Reviewed By: anonymous358 On: March 31, 2007 18:21 CDT
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Just to tell you when you were describing kagome's scent you said sakura and cherry blossom, sakura means cherry blossom, sorry just had to say that. The story's really good so far, update soon please.
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Reviewed By: kagsfan On: March 29, 2007 07:18 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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i just wanted to add that what i wrote before about inuyasha, i wanted to say that with whats happened to hiei, he deserves love too. And i think kagome is just the girl. She is loving and she doesn't care about a persons past, she excepts everyone. (of course not naraku but thats besides the point):) can't wait til the next update.
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Reviewed By: ashtonreed [MediaMiner Member] On: March 28, 2007 21:59 CDT
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Ive always been a big Hiei/Kag fan myself... also love Sess/Kag. Cant wait to see where the story goes. UPDATE SOON!!
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Reviewed By: Taea-chan On: March 28, 2007 20:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome chapter! Gotta love Hiei and all his moodiness - great relationship addition there ;) I can't wait for your next update! - please keep up with the wicked writing skillz - love your story and plot ideas! Brilliant! ^^
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Reviewed By: NikkiN12 On: March 27, 2007 20:25 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your disclaimer is all wrong, the manga is owned solely by Rumiko Takahashi, not the anime. With that being said, I love the story, keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: jessie07 On: March 27, 2007 16:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
the story is great please keep it going, cause now that u got my attition i want to know wut happens!!!!
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Title: missjay
Reviewed By: jem89 On: March 27, 2007 09:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story! Please update soon : ) the idea of kags with sess and kurama is hot
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Reviewed By: Vulcana On: March 27, 2007 07:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So they meet again. It was a very nice chapter. I like how you are developing the story.
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Title: ...
Reviewed By: PureMiko_Kagome69ner [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2007 06:22 CDT
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Hehe. Wow. Hiei got told. Haha. Update a.s.a.p. Oh, and how did Kagome meet Hiei? Update a.s.a.p, please and thank you!!! This is a Kagome/Kurama/Sesshoumaru pairing, right? I just wanna know; can you change it or add another person? Errr ... Demon?
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Reviewed By: Nuriel On: March 27, 2007 01:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to say, your story is very good. I actually really look forward to your updates. The pacing is natural, and the pov changes don't bother me at all, you were correct in not making a big break or announcing who was speaking all the time. So, anyway. Great job!
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Reviewed By: crystal lilith [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2007 00:55 CDT
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I really liked the comforting transaction between Hiei and Kagome...it was nice...
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Reviewed By: madmiko [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2007 00:25 CDT
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Oh yay! Loved it when Kagome went up against Yusuke and Kurama. The cloaks were a nice way to keep her from recognizing Kurama, or will she be able to recognize his signature now? I absolutely LOVED the Hiei/Kagome interaction -- I like it that you gave them some history together. and I like the way she recognized how much he has changed. The hug and the slap were perfect. I guess they're friends, huh? Very interesting. Just wait until he finds out Kurama's interested in her! This will be fun! Dang, but you've got too many awesome males in this fic!!
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