| "Shikotsumyaku" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: kyara_athena [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2007 01:03 CDT
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Nas!! Kyyaa!! it was awsome!!Really!! My god, this is so damn good!! the story is getting better and better. Im inlove of your fic! please continue with the great job your doing!, well I will wait for the next chapter but please do it quikly cause' its too good!don´t make me wait too long... or I´m not going to survive... well maybe I will, but anyway... ONEGAI. It's a bit difficult to me to read your fanfic because I don't speak or read in this case much english but it worth the effort. About what you said of the late update and the reason behind, let me tell you that I totally understend you, some storys write themselves and it can't be helped when it gets "corner". It happen often to myself. Anyway, know I NEED to know whats going to do my beloved Kimimaro so we'll "read us" later...until then... JA NE!!!
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Reviewed By: yer lil demon [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2007 11:45 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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YAAAAAA! i love this please keep it up and update soon ^_^
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Reviewed By: Sweetdeily [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2007 12:53 CDT
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hmm, a solid start and a bit of a slow developement. I find it's a little too slow and the chapters are far too short. your layout is agonizing to look at and doesn't flow very well- it's hard to tell when one person is the focus and then someone else is, the whole thing all sort of jumbles together in one big mess. also the lack of proper speech marks keeps making me think I'm reading thoughts, not speech. The untranslated japanese scattered left right and center is a source of indistinct irritation admidst what would otherwise be fairly characteristic and enjoyable dialouges. But in terms of characterization and plot the ship is shapely. I actually feel vaguely reminded of one of the stories on my favourite's list that i really enjoyed because of the characters. The plot is interesting and seems to have some kind of solid direction, spurred mostly by kimimaru, but it's extremely slow, as I said, and doesn't develope much in porportion to the amount of chapters that you've written. I feel that it should be a lot more further along than what it is, you seem to have sacrificed developement for character interactions. Overall, I'm not ready to really give this a rating, as it hasn't reached a stage of developement I feel it should warrant something.
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Reviewed By: kyara_athena [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2007 14:48 CDT
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Hi! am new here but I had read a lot of fanfics and let me tell you this one is great! please continue it cause' i'll be witing...until then...ja ne!!
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Reviewed By: Gaara Freak [MediaMiner Member] On: June 23, 2007 11:16 CDT
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YAY he's fitting in nicely now isn't he?
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Reviewed By: Gaara Freak [MediaMiner Member] On: May 29, 2007 08:22 CDT
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poor lee...
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Reviewed By: Gaara Freak [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2007 11:26 CDT
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aww! Kimimaru is a cutie! cute as in adorable like a little child.
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Reviewed By: Gaara Freak [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2007 11:16 CDT
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ooh! um, what does shanno mean?
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Reviewed By: Gaara Freak [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2007 06:42 CDT
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Sweet! This is so awesome!
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Reviewed By: Gaara Freak [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2007 11:23 CDT
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I think Kimmimaro is so cute! Childlike I mean. My heart belongs to Gaara-Chan. Anyway yay! he shall live!
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2007 12:05 CDT
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Hmmm, the story gets more interesting. With one more chapter I'll be able to critique your style of writing. Keep going, this concept has serious possibilities, and definitely seems interesting. Please update soon, later.
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2007 04:11 CDT
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Huh. A good start, I have to say. Please, write more, and then I'll tell you more of what I think. THough I gotta say, I like Kimimaro's point of view, and your descriptions. They rock. So, Keep writing, and I'll review more later.
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