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Title: *deep breath* SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: Kita and Subu-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 25, 2007 22:27 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!! OMG!!!! Hot Drake!!! *purrs* I can so imagine Drake in all black. *drools and continues squealing* (And while she acts like the total fangirl that she is, I'll take over. Loved this chapter and in the opinion of someone who's been writing since they were able to pick up a pencil, your style of writing and sense of timing and exposition are improving all the time. The pacing of this chapter was well-done and everyone had their moment in the limelight. And I'm going to have to act like my roommate here and tell you how much I liked what you've done with Drake. He prayed that whoever had inspired the sudden change didn't die soon. Being a fan of the blond-ish breed, it was a very nice change of scenery. I absolutely adored that moment. Berkley giving Drake the appreciative eye before he recognized him... *laughs* And Dee's reaction... priceless. Poor JJ didn't know what hit him. Can't wait for the next chapter to find out what JJ thinks of the new, improved Drake. It's bound to be interesting. And as your writing continues to improve, so too does the story. I now return you to your regularly scheduled fangirl...) YAYAYAYAAYYYYYYYYYYYYY!!!!!! *Squeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee* I love this soooooooooooooo much! YAY! YAAAAAYYYYYYY!!!!
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Title: *giggle*
Reviewed By: Kita and Subu-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2007 02:12 CDT
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*poke, poke* Hey. Loving the story so far. *Squeeeee* Drake and JJ happies for me! I can't wait to see what's next. I mean it! I CAN'T WAIT!!! *WHAP* (Sorry for that, Garita. Someone had a few drinks before they went online. I love the story so far and the Drake and JJ moments are priceless. Drake and the clothes thrown on the floor was a really sharp line. Very well thought out. If this is the kind of Musing Daxemon offers can I borrow some? Kita has a whole file of your artwork saved onto our computer and "JJ's Dilemma" is the new desktop. It makes me laugh every time I turn on the laptop. Keep up the wonderful work. -S)
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Reviewed By: Daxemon [MediaMiner Member] On: August 11, 2007 07:57 CDT
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Waaahhhhhh....I'm so happy. I was able to help. *weeps with joy uncontrollably* I'll be alright I'll try not to cry until I dehydrate...I may need an I.V. drip though if I keep this up. You really took my suggestion. I feel appreciated and yeah the next step that would be a good idea is bringing Ria's character more to life. So far you've piqued my interest with the Ria character and I'm more than ready to find out more about her and her role in the fic. By the way thanks alot for the review on my fic. I was beyond terrified when I uploaded since it was my first fic ever to be put out there for people to actually tear apart. It took my boyfriend and one of my co-workers two days to covince me that if I went through all the trouble to write it with the intention to post, I might as well do it. So I did. Thanks to you. Kita and Subu was the inspiration and you were the catalyst that pushed me over the edge to suck up my courage. Thanks. Until next update.
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Title: cattidono
Reviewed By: catti-dono [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2007 15:31 CDT
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YEAH!!!..no penis piercing...YUMMY...Ryo in tight leather...poor Mary...wont she be surprised in the end...giggles...catti
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Reviewed By: Daxemon [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2007 12:57 CDT
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One more thing, I thought Drake intercepting JJ on his way to glomping Dee was such a perfect little scene to just throw in there. No dialogue, just Drake calmly taking things in hand {JJ that is}. Really great. It put a smile on my face. I guess you could call this a suggestion or a question, but maybe you could start to flesh out the relationship between Drake and JJ sooner than later just in case, so it doesn't get lost as the story progresses. Alright I'm done. Till next update.
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Reviewed By: Daxemon [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2007 12:49 CDT
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If I start babbling you only have yourself to blame. I'm a nervous wreck. "Muse" the title has me drunk with power. My hands are shaking as I write this and I have a crazed glint in my eyes, which is causing my co-workers to back away from me in terror. Suggestions....hmmmmmmmmm. First I didn't mind the fact that you didn't write the entire lemon. Sometimes it just isn't needed and what you wrote was right on track. I really don't have any suggestions right now, since I've never done this before, except maybe keep updating. Yeah thats it, keep updating. I'll think about some things to suggest and throw them your way. I appreciate your trust in me, hopefully it's not ill placed. I'll do my best to live up to your skill as an author. Thanks Your "Muse", Daxemon
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Title: cattidono
Reviewed By: catti-dono [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2007 21:19 CDT
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Okay...so Ill wait on where the tattoo is going to be and what it is going to be...but I do not have patience, just ask Kit and Akita....laughs...*hums*...catti
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Title: SQUEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!
Reviewed By: Kita and Subu-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2007 19:54 CDT
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YAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAY!!!!!!!! OMG, I loved that whole thing with Drake intercepting JJ like that... And WOnder what it was about Dee that irritated him???? *giggles crazily* One beta--It's temporary apartment-not temporarily apartment!! (Subu here, Garita. thanks for another wonderful chapter. Well done with the Drake moments... Loved the bit about JJ restraining himself until he saw Dee smiling... Yep, that's Jemmy for you...
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Title: "Talking puddle of goo"
Reviewed By: Daxemon [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2007 12:22 CDT
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Garita, what you wrote at the end of chapter 4 in your latest update caught me so off guard that it turned me into a grinning puddle of overly excited goo. I actually dragged my boyfriend over to the computer {like he could give a flying ----}just to show him how appreciated I was, you made my day, thanks. Oh by the way there may not have been much action this update but patience is a virtue and I'm more than happy to wait because I would rather take my time than rush it, because what I'm reading so far is so great....don't you agree Kita/Subu? Till next update.
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Title: Please DO NOT FEED THED FANGIRL...
Reviewed By: Kita and Subu-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2007 22:55 CDT
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Oh, no, his confusion was wrapped in a box labeled `Drake Parker'. And it didn't come with instructions. *laughs* I really like that line. That's so the summary of Drake and JJ's relationship. Very well done... *pondering Dee's take on Ryo's tattoo(s)* Love ya girl, and thanks for the art... Kita changed the background on my laptop... I found it this morning when I turned it on to check my mail... (very cute!) I thought Ted's moment was great.)
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Title: cattidono
Reviewed By: catti-dono [MediaMiner Member] On: July 05, 2007 18:53 CDT
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Nope...but it keeps you limber when dodging stuff that Suba-chan throws at you...laughs... Poor Ryo...Id like to know exactly where this tattoo is going to be as well as the piercings...(hopefully its not a penis bar...GOD...those look painful!!!!)....catti
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Title: *bouncy, bouncy, bouncy!!!*
Reviewed By: Kita and Subu-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2007 21:34 CDT
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I went back and re-re-reread the first chapters of this!!!! WAIIIII!!!!! I love it! Don't blame me for the Drake&JJ moments...*shifty eyes* really, it's not my fault... We'll blame it on... Subu... yeah, it's all Subu's fault... I love this story so far. More, more, more, more,more,moremoreMOREMOREMOREMOREMORE!!!!! Must see more...*pants* *THUD* (Sorry for that! Someone got into the chocolate while I was packing... I enjoyed this very much, Garita, and as always keep up the good work...)
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Reviewed By: Daxemon [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2007 15:04 CDT
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Yes it was short, but I agree that was a good place to end it. I can't wait to see where this goes, it sounds like it could be a great roller coaster ride of a fanfic, looking forward to it and what picture? Kita and Subu are a great duo to be inspired by, I pray that your muse doesn't abandon you, because this fanfic already has my mouth watering. Until next update.
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Title: cattidono
Reviewed By: catti-dono [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2007 20:22 CDT
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Just ignore kita...she such a stickler...but feed akita-chan chocolate and she will do almost anything for you...story is looking good...dont wait too long between updates...catti
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Title: Not bad so far...
Reviewed By: Kita and Subu-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 24, 2007 22:23 CDT
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You have a strong grasp of story, though there were one or two spots where it got a little muddled. Just keep working on it and you'll get it. Only one or two spelling mistakes that Kita saw. (*Giggles* Poor, left behind JJ. Good story so far!!!!)
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