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| "Simply, Alchemy" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Dark_Angle666 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2007 14:10 CDT
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Yay! THat was a wonderful update! I was half wondering if you'd just paline stopped. Anyway, it's getting really good. Very suspensful. I'll try to be patient until the next update, but no garuntees. Great work!
| Reviewed By: Dark_Angle666 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 19, 2007 14:11 CDT
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Okay, so I read your story for the second time (it's on my fav's list!:D) and I have some advice for fight scenes: Use power words! The bigger and angrier the words sound, the more intense the fight is. Also, put lot's of emotion and a little bit of gore. Gore is *usualy* good. Well, I'm not sure if that will be of any help (like I said, battle-scenes are not my thing either!) but those are my two cents. I don't even know what that means... Anyway, still waiting for an update cuz you've left us hanging off the edge! Good Luck!
| Title: Kaoriel (not signed in)
Reviewed By: Kaoriel [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2007 16:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is amazing!
| Reviewed By: Dark_Angle666 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 14, 2007 13:48 CDT
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Hey there! I'm pretty sure 'failing patheticly' isn't possible. lol, anyway, that was very good. Fight scenes are very hard. They take a very morbid attitude to write. I'm not very good at them either. (I mostly just skip those parts...) Well your writting style is very good, and this was a great start to a wonderful story! Keep up the good work (please) and update frequently! (I find most of my entertainment on this site so i very much enjoy updates and what not...pathetic isin't it?) Well, that was the longest review I've ever written! Keep writting because I REALLY want to know what happens! ~Sherubii~
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