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Title: Ages
Reviewed By: little_white_kitsune [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2008 17:38 CST
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Actually, Rumiko Takahashi recently released Inuyasha's age as being 17 when he was pinned; so 67 when awakened by Kagome. Just some info. ;)
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Title: Need a beta?
Reviewed By: nekokyttin [MediaMiner Member] On: May 07, 2007 17:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Definitely keep up the good work, usually it takes four or five chapters to pull me in, yours caught my attention immediately! I would love to beta read for you, I'm one of those who loves a first peek into stories or chapters! Your writing style is awesome, hopefully you'll read mine and think the same of me, though angst and a little action is my typical thing!
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Reviewed By: sakuralovesinuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2007 06:47 CDT
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Every chapter is pulling me in deeper! I love all the emotional baggage....it's making your story complex and those are always the best reads!!
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Reviewed By: fallenangel7583 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2007 16:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
the story is progressing nicely. the drama isn't rushed and is pretty much all up front, which is nice. i know that there are stories building, and they way you are leading up to them is wonderful! poor kagome, i feel awful for the poor girl and i'm glad that she was able to make it back to Yash. five year, huh? so she's twenty? what an age to lose so much! I love that Sango's had three kids, it's cute and i hope that she has a boy for Miroku. i love that you've altered their diction enough to mark a change from Kagome to them due to the shift in ages. the archcisms that you're using is great, just watch some of your spelling (lose next to loose). i used to do the same thing all the time!! LOL. you have a great story building here, keep it up!!!
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Reviewed By: Seiteki_Tenshi [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2007 10:43 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
totally awesome story...i love the way youve brought kagome back and especially the scene with her granpa, that was really sweet. now im wondering what happened while kagome was gone to inuyasha, we already know what happened to kagome...
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Reviewed By: sakuralovesinuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: May 02, 2007 02:53 CDT
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Your story has the makings to be great. I am already eager to see what the next chapter brings. I did not think that your chapter was too short. It seemed to set the stage for what will be coming next.
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