| "Getting It. (Desires - Book one.)" Reviews/Comments [ 29 ] |
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Reviewed By: Spirit_Talker [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2007 19:45 CDT
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I'm gonna have to say that last chapter was iffy. It didn't really 'jump around', but keeping track of the characters was a bit difficult, especially during the 'romance' scene. I had to read it twice just to get who was doing what there. And the scene with Marty and the gang was difficult as well. This seemed like a hard chapter to write, though, because of the plots you had to drag together and I'm going to have to say you did a pretty damn good job summing it up. And I'm sure in the next chapter you'll have everything figured out. The Jayson, Shayne scene seems like a fun one to do, a little 'break' on the seriousness (that is, if it doesn't get interrupted xD) Can't wait for the next chapter! Even if I have to. Oh, and one last thing, you might want to be careful on what words you use where and with typos. I know you don't plan on getting it published, but it makes it look more 'professional' when everything is correct anyways. If that's what you're shooting for, that is xD Keep it up Met-luff!(oh, expect a review from me for like... every chapter by the way xD)
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Reviewed By: tinkle time kelly [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2007 09:04 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi! Nice to see an update (before I forget what the story is about). Still this story has got me hooked enough that I don't forget. I like your characters and their situations. You're blurring the lines between right/wrong, good/evil. It's all relative as fics and life should be. Looking forward to seeing how you work every thing out.
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Reviewed By: Spirit_Talker [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2007 20:58 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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Hey met-luff. You know who I am of course xD Just gonna say, LOVE the story so far! I've read all of it and waiting for the next update so you best hurry! (just kidding) I was a little worried at the beginning because of how quickly Shayne jumped into the 'i'm gay' boat with Jayson and everything, but I see how it worked out nicely, or rather how you made it work out. Interesting characters, and I find myself relating to Shayne a lot (of course you know why xD) and I've always loved Shayne to death as it was. Can't wait for more!
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Reviewed By: tinkle time kelly [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2007 07:48 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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Hey! Good chapter. Looking forward to what happens next.
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Reviewed By: Dark_Angle666 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2007 22:06 CDT
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Hey there, nice work! I just wanted to say agian how much I really like this story! Really, I just love it! Your writting is so fluid, so convincing that this story could actually be happening as I read it. Well, continue to be amazing and update frequently!
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Reviewed By: tinkle time kelly [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2007 11:57 CDT
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This is very good am looking forward to more.
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Reviewed By: Dark_Angle666 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2007 15:06 CDT
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OMG! That was great, shocknig, but great! I love how cute Jason is, the whole 'am i gay?' conflict. It's the best. I can't belive the way Randy killed Tom! It was so...sudden. It was awsome. Well that was a great update and i'm finally caught up again. Good work. Oh, and enjoy Canada, my home and native land! (We just celebrated our 140th birthday!)
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Reviewed By: tinkle time kelly [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2007 09:00 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just started reading this. Only on chapter 7. It's just beginning to get interesting. Noticed you've updated. Good! It was just the reminder,that I needed an alert on new chapters. So,so far it's going to sit on my 'Fav'list. Looking forward to reading more.
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Reviewed By: mindfreak [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2007 07:05 CDT
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*.* You updated again! YAY!!!! And Shane and 'Cupcake' are now a couple...and should have 'fun'...~.o I loved this chapter...I can only imagine that there's more good to come with the way you write....*.* UPDATE SOON.....please
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Reviewed By: mindfreak [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2007 20:58 CDT
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OMG!!!!OMG!!!! That guy was SHOT!!!!!! What a wicked twist...Ever think about writing a book or a novel of some sort? Your work is impressive. I like it. Thanks for the update...I can't wait to see what happens to Jason and Shane! And Clark now that I think of it...It would be interesting if he turned into a bad guy...hmmmm
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Reviewed By: mindfreak [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2007 20:30 CDT
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This story makes me sad beacuse I know gays can't join the army and actually be gay...I know cuz I'm in it. And as unfair as that seems, it makes this story that much more interesting. Shane being my favorite character...I hope he's not one of those bad guys. I hope that you update before July cuz come the 5th, I won't have acess to a computer until November and that's a long time...like 6 months. I hope you comtinue and not give up for lack of reviews like most people here do...people like myself. For I will review every chapter from here on out if thats what it takes...so with that said....UPDATE SOON!!!!!
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Reviewed By: Dark_Angle666 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2007 13:36 CDT
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It's graet, really, i absolutley love it. I actually want ot know more about that Roy guy. Something smells like trouble! Anyway, thanks for the update, yur work is awsome!
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Reviewed By: Dark_Angle666 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2007 10:57 CDT
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Hey! Thaks for the updates! I'm absolutley lovin your story. Your writting skills are very good (like character, setting, plot flow and diction...wow those were big words!) Keep on keepin' on!
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Reviewed By: Dark_Angle666 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2007 20:19 CDT
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Yay! I love it! I've officaialy adde it ot my favorites list, and that's a special place to be. REally, your writting style is very good. I like the story...very dramatic! Keep up the good work!
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