| "Getting It. (Desires - Book one.)" Reviews/Comments [ 29 ] |
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Reviewed By: tinkle time kelly [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2008 05:44 CST
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GOOD LUCK! Hope it works out for you. Just keep writing. Later.
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Reviewed By: mindfreak [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2007 00:00 CST
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YAY!!! An update finally! I keep checking my email for an update and it is here! I can't wait for the second book.
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Reviewed By: mindfreak [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2007 11:01 CST
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I refuse to believe it's over. Not like that...what happened to shane? Derek can't last forever! I hope that changes. It should end with shane and jason!
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Reviewed By: mindfreak (not signed in) On: December 04, 2007 08:57 CST
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i see how it is. I return from 5 months of hell and your story has taken off. I haven't gotten to the point i left off at but I'm super happy that you haven't quit like most people (cough cough me cough) do. Thanx for the updates. -mindfreak-
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Reviewed By: tinkle time kelly [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2007 09:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hope you just don't end it here. There are far too many loose ends to tie up. You might be able to pull off an epilogue in the next chapter if you put the two major characters together(Sean/Jason) it took the whole book to build a "serious" relationship between those two. To throw all that away in one chapter to combine a "major" character (Jason) to a "minor" character (Derek), will make your story incomplete. It would take more than another chapter, to make that even "believable". But its your story and only you know where you going with it, and you do have another chapter to explain or "complete this one. I'm looking forward to it.
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Reviewed By: Dark_Angle666 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 23, 2007 22:20 CST
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That was definatley worth the wait! I really do love this story! it sems so real, the way characters interact and stuff, nice. I can never decide who I like and who I don't like, because you see two sides to everybody. Well, I suck at reviews so i'll stop talking now. Keep up the good work!!;D
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Reviewed By: tinkle time kelly [MediaMiner Member] On: November 20, 2007 06:04 CST
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Well done.
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Reviewed By: Dark_Angle666 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2007 21:04 CST
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ps. I really like the Jason-Shane interaction in recent chapters. That's what it should be like. Well, almost, I mean they obviously like each other but things are alot less akward, and they're freinds again! Sorry, I'm rambling...keep up the good work! :D
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Reviewed By: Dark_Angle666 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2007 21:02 CST
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Holy Crap! I swear to Gawd I thought Shane was Dead! I was so far behind i had to catch up on like five chapters. Well, you did good. Great actually, the story is actually amazing. Can't wait for the update! (I'll have to though, so...lol) Aneyway, great job kid!
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Reviewed By: tinkle time kelly [MediaMiner Member] On: October 21, 2007 16:34 CDT
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Good chapter!
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Reviewed By: tinkle time kelly [MediaMiner Member] On: October 16, 2007 13:01 CDT
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Interesting chapter. Looking forward to seeing how it all ties in. Thankies for the quick chapter!
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Reviewed By: tinkle time kelly [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2007 23:23 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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Thanks for the chapter. Like where you're going with this. Also like verble interaction between characters. It helps understand them.
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Reviewed By: tinkle time kelly [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2007 07:44 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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Believe it or not you still have readers(well me at least), this site sucks in the review numbers(don't know why). So that being said, I wouldn't hold chapters for ransome/reviews it annoys the ones who are actually reading your work. I really like this story, am always happy to see an update.
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Reviewed By: Spirit_Talker [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2007 20:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wee! So much fun! I know I actually owe you like... what, three reviews? xD -is a really bad slacker- Chapter 23 was enjoyable to read. The whole Shayne pleading for Jayson thing was so adorable, and it made Shayne seem like he actually has emotions, not just sex lust. And yay for Jayson showing that he has balls and standing up against Shayne! Grammar and such was much better in your last couple of chapters. And they've been very entertaining. Chapter 23 was decent to read. I expect a lot in chapter 24 to unfold, maybe a big talk with Jayson and someone else is planned to get into Jayson's head? Can't wait for the next chapter! Keep the updates coming! Because yes, we are reading, even if we don't always review!
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Reviewed By: Dark_Angle666 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2007 15:48 CDT
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Wow, Things are really heating up! The Drama, the action, it's all fabulous! Chapter nineteen wasn't taht bad, it was pretty good. Every author has one of those akward filler-type chapters, story wouldn't be the same without it! Well, that's all I can say today, so keep on keeping on!
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