| "To Fall into Rut" Reviews/Comments [ 25 ] |
Reviewed By: child_of_the_moon [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2008 16:21 CST
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Wow. Are you going to update? I really like this. Totally different situation. I hope you update soon!
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Reviewed By: Silverinumiko On: January 12, 2008 15:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like it and it's not like he has any choice. It's either he takes her or he dies, and she doesn't seem to have a problem with it at all. The last pa rt of the last chapter, it made me think that she actually wanted him to really take her. And since they have only been in the cell together for 2 days, their both gona get to know each other in a whole bunch of different ways, and not just sexually either Otherwise, I really like it, make more chapters and Update SOON!!
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Reviewed By: redrose [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2008 20:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an amazing story!!!!!!!I totaly love you for this please keep writing can't wait to see what happen so hurry up!!!
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Title: T Fall into a Rut!
Reviewed By: Fairy goddess [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2007 22:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I want to read more to this, I'm very curious as to how they are going to escape! MORE!
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Reviewed By: Fairy goddess [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2007 22:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
MORE!
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Reviewed By: Faedra On: November 05, 2007 17:47 CST
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Ehm, concerning your title and summary, I think the word you really was looking for is "In heat" not "in rut". Animals/demons would go into heat and then they rut aka having sex/mate/shag/fuck or whatever word you want to use. Hope you found the information helpfull.
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Reviewed By: pandora-of-the-south [MediaMiner Member] On: September 13, 2007 19:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
really looking forward to your update!!!
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Title: WOW!
Reviewed By: Stefaniethinks On: August 27, 2007 17:12 CDT
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Yaay! This time, the lime/lemonishness was really really good! Not tedious in the least! And the fact that Shessy didn't believe her trustingness, made it seem all the more believable! Can't wait for the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: coldTenshieyes [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2007 23:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! I'm really lurving this fanfiction, it's sweet and awesome all at the same time! Hope you continue soon! Great job!! L8RZ! :0)
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Title: Great!
Reviewed By: Stefaneithinks On: August 23, 2007 01:43 CDT
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Hi! I really really like where this story is going. You attracted me here, and I'm not even really a Shessy/Kagome Shipper! There are only a few things I'd like to point out. I get that you're setting the mood, and the scene and all that, but try and read through this again, to make sure you don't over state anything. Here's an example " A scream stuck in her throat, mouth opened wide in an attempt to release it from its hiding place within her convulsing throat." As oposed to something like this '' A scream stuck in her throat, mouth opened wide in an attempt to release it from its hiding place.'' Because you end up saying twice something about her throat, and it comes out a bit tedious. Otherwise, wonderful! I can't wait to see the next update.
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Reviewed By: sweetkijo [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2007 18:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was a really good chapter! The lime was fantastic and Sess is begining to show a little heart! Gah, I love him!!
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Reviewed By: Corzie On: August 22, 2007 17:22 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update soon. PLEASE! -bows-
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Reviewed By: Fanfactor [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2007 16:58 CDT
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This is good, though I usually only read canon pairings this one is good. though the whole willingly let herself submit to him is a little off but that's Ok. Have fun writing.
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Reviewed By: serendith [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2007 13:52 CDT
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I really like your story thus far. I hope you write more!
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Reviewed By: bancomat [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2007 13:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not the best pieces of fan fiction I read so far... The characters aren't well developed enough and the plot is a bit choppy, not to mention the spelling errors (but they could have been a lot worse too). On the other hand, your premise is interesting and it's fun to read about the 'situation' the two find themselves in. You should try getting a bit more personality into Kagome and keep the style a bit more consistent.
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Title: love this story to you rock
Reviewed By: Inuyashalover161 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 02, 2007 00:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
your such a great writer this story is just as awesome i cannot wait to what happens next is she going to become sesshomaru's mate in this story to i love the whole kagome sesshomaru pairing your a fanominal writer i love both of your incredible stories i cannot wait for the updates on both of your amazing stories keep up the awesome work your # 1 fan *hug you*
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Reviewed By: Langus [MediaMiner Member] On: May 24, 2007 01:08 CDT
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Okay well I really liked chapter one so when I saw you'd updated I was pretty excited about chapter two but now that I've read it I feel disappointed. Chapter one was so well written and compared it chapter two comes up short. I'm not meaning this as a flame, more as constructive criticism. This last chapter had a lot of play by play, expecially during the rutting scene. I know it's hard to write a lemon but it really could've benefitted from hearing more about their thoughts or feelings. It ended up sounding more like a sports play by play - Sesshomaru did this and then Kagome did that and then Sesshomaru did this etc. etc. Not very entertaining... And I'm sorry but I don't buy Kagome's whole "I'm a good and dutiful miko so I'm going to give up my virginity and let myself be raped just because he's the lord of the west" attitude. It just comes off as really unbelievable. It's one thing to be a strong woman and be a martyr for a cause but this doesn't really fit the bill. It would've been a lot more interesting/believable if you'd had her fight him on it at least a little. Well...the first chapter was a really good effort but I don't think I'll continue reading from here on out. Sorry.
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Reviewed By: -x-kagome-x- [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2007 14:39 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
very good so far keep writing i want to know what happens!
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Reviewed By: lockedincar [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2007 23:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
interesting, I definately want to see why Sess thinks it might turn out well.
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Reviewed By: syd vicious On: May 13, 2007 23:03 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
FINISH! please? lol
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Reviewed By: xCarCrashHeartx [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2007 23:52 CDT
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a good story. i appreciate the way you portrayed sesshoumaru. its better than most stories i have seen before. im looking forward to your other chapters. please update soon!
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Title: cactusflower
Reviewed By: Cactusflower [MediaMiner Member] On: May 05, 2007 18:15 CDT
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I like very much how this story is going so far. Don't stop writing I would like to see how it is going to end. Update when you have time no hurry too.
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Title: AWESOME STORY
Reviewed By: Briana_D [MediaMiner Member] On: May 05, 2007 05:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well done!!! The story is pretty awesome and for a change different from the Kag-sees-Inu-with-Kik-and-runs-to-Sess stories. Sess is one of my favourite characters from InuYasha and I like the way you have perfectly characterised him in this story with no OOCness. Absolutely love the story and style of writing. PLEASE PLEASE update soon. Briana
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Reviewed By: aj On: May 05, 2007 00:20 CDT
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this sounds pretty good please update soon
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Reviewed By: Ethril Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 04, 2007 23:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hmmm...you have a good story started here, I can definately see this story becoming one of my favorites once a few more chapters are added. Your spelling is excellent and your grammer is quite good. Keep up the good work.
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