| "Reborn" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] |
Reviewed By: naruharemlover [MediaMiner Member] On: October 05, 2008 14:53 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please post the next chapter soon i was allmost going crazy when i didnt have any more chapters to read THIS IS SO DAMN GOD so please please please post the next chapter soon
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Title: good job
Reviewed By: hawkeye0 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2007 19:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey your still a good writer even during the summer huh =)
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Reviewed By: queenhinata [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2007 23:55 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
great job.
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Reviewed By: queenhinata [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2007 14:10 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was really good.
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Reviewed By: queenhinata [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2007 20:34 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wonder what Grey Light and Fire Shadow are up to..
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Reviewed By: queenhinata [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2007 20:30 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think this story has a unique plot.
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Reviewed By: queenhinata [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2007 20:23 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
It sounds interesting.
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Reviewed By: queenhinata [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2007 20:19 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
The story sounds good..
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Title: good job
Reviewed By: THE_WRITER_OF_CROW On: June 04, 2007 13:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it is a great story and i hope you decide to finish it.
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Title: much beter
Reviewed By: hawkeye1234 On: May 28, 2007 19:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
much better hope you have a good summer
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Reviewed By: Saric [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2007 23:26 CDT
Comment/Review:
update soon please very unique story line. enjoyed reading the story.
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Reviewed By: Juan Carlos Ng [MediaMiner Member] On: May 19, 2007 16:16 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a good chapter, even thought it was a little confusing at first...Keep it going! This is great! ^^
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Title: sucks
Reviewed By: hawkeyeohio On: May 09, 2007 08:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i just wanted to write somthing lol
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2007 23:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm just gonna say it, negative as this sounds, your style of writing sucks. It can be improved upon, but you need to decide how you want to write. Simply put, writing is the art of painting a scene, an event, with words. Same deal with poetry, except using verses, line structure, and much less detail. Point is, "show, not tell" is the best piece of advise I got for ya. And please, FOLLOW THAT ADVISE!!! You're writing this like a cold description of the scene. Show how Naruto became a bloody smear, don't just say it offhand, like you have. Think through how you want the scene to play out, and detail it, describe it, and show the scene, instead of simply saying, "and then there was a bloody spray where Naruto once stood." That's not only a crappy thing to do to a character (that waaaaay too many people like) but also poor word choice, and no description whatsoever. With that in mind, you do have some good insight into what you want to write. But you need to describe your scenes, even the crappy ones, so you can get to what you actually want in the story. Remember that piece of advise.
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Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2007 02:02 CDT
Comment/Review:
I suggest you actually upload a chapter. Please do so, and don't pull this stuff. Once you have a chapter here, with ext, I'll review it. Please correct this error.
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