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| "What If" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] | Reviewed By: sakura-bell On: July 01, 2007 02:40 CDT
Comment/Review:
Wonder what Tomoyo has up her sleeve. I love reading this now. Thanks for updating n_n
| Title: Yes!!!
Reviewed By: snowdeep On: June 16, 2007 23:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes!! other story i can read i'm so happy i like this twist it was intersing to see how Syaeron came earlyer in the story and i like the fact that Sakuras mom is still alive i like that you introduced her so casually it semed that she was always in the story.please write more please.
| Reviewed By: DrakeTheDuelist [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2007 21:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
First of all, you have a very good editor. Consider yourself a fortunate author. Also, the story was actually pretty canonically-accurate, for a "what if" fic anyway. (The sheer nature of "what if" fics deals a pretty harsh blow to originality by default, so don't worry too much about the rating; that hit was unavoidable for this fic type.) While it's clear to see some paralells in these kinds of fics, you did write a pretty clever way of opening the Clow Book. Is Nadeshiko's role going to really be all that impactful? Because it seems like the main change is introducing Syaoran to the story from the beginning, and not so much about Nadeshiko's involvment. (I'd imagine she'd harp on Toya for calling Sakura a monster all the time.) Also, are you going to do all 52 Clow Cards this way? And the Sakura Cards too? If so, then you're in for a long decade. I'm writing an "alter-ego Clow Card" style fic (*cough*read*plz*cough*), but I kept the population of my "Kaos Cards" down to eight because a full set would take forever to write. I also know someone who actually did a fanfic about all 52 cards (a fan-manga called Cardcaptor Torika), and it's about four years old now and it's still not done. So just consider it fair warning that if you're going to do this for real, you'd best be committed. Good luck, and I hope you keep writing more, because it's got such a good start already.
| Reviewed By: sakura-bell On: June 09, 2007 23:25 CDT
Comment/Review:
Wonder if Syaoran is going to get pissed off at Sakura...? Good work so far, I've enjoyed reading this chapter
| Title: Please write more
Reviewed By: True Finder [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2007 05:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I agree with the first person who wrote a review. It does seem to be an interesting story. Can you write more? PLOT: Haven't seen it yet. That's a relief. You wouldn't believe how many of the fanfics that i've read are so repetitive GRADE:B+ SPELLING:Perfect.So far. Keep it up. GRADE:A GRANMAR: Just one mistake. GRADE:B+ Style of writing: OK GRADE:B OVERALL:B+
| Reviewed By: sakura-bell On: May 19, 2007 00:12 CDT
Comment/Review:
This seems like it's going to be an interesting story. I'll stick around to see what happens. Please update soon!
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