Reviewed By:Daxemon [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2007 09:47 CDT Comment/Review: Don't listen to anyone who says this fanfic was not writtern well or OC. I believe that if this were to have happended between Yuki and Shuichi that this a quite believeable plot line. My only "criticism" is your lemon could use a little work. It felt and little rushed and reserved. I could almost feel the tension in you as you wrote it, like you were wincing the whole time you were writing said lemon. Otherwise it was a very good story and had me grinning at the end. Please write more. Thanks
Reviewed By: kimmichan On: May 20, 2007 18:28 CDT Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review: OH please write more to this story. It's too good to leave it there.
