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Reviewed By: kawaii chica [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2007 16:59 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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this is a great story line.... i like how sesshou is so open n shows feelings n how original he seems to me. i thought it was a bit funny how he blurted out he loved kags n how uncertain he was of himself.... to tell ya the truth i really wasnt expecting hojo to go rapist... talk bout curve ball.... i have to agree KIMR....to bring Naraku back is like everyother story with naraku in it only that it would be no jewel search n no feudal era..... if his spirit would like haunt kags in her dreams and do stuff to her in those dreams that like ok great story, update when ya can, but dnt keep us waitin to long!!! luck with writing the next chappy!!
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Reviewed By: inuyasha lov3r [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2007 21:24 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a great story! I love how he is so open with Kagome. I also love how its in out time instead of the inuyasha's era. Its just so dramatic. I mean Naraku is back, Kagome is pregnant geez how more dramatic can you get? Anyway keep up the good work! I am dying to read the rest of this story!!!
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Reviewed By: Kimr [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2007 20:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
To bring back naruko, NO to imply that kagome is just dreaming, that's fine. Naruko is dead to bring him back after his defeat would just be another inuyasha story minus the quest for the jewel. My advice don;t bring him back, haunt dreams maybe but he's dead lets leave him at that! in regards to the story in general, could do with some more page breaks to improve the readability of the chapters. keep them coming!
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Reviewed By: kitsunegirl48 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2007 13:25 CDT
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Update soon, k? I wanna see how Shippou reacts to seeing Kagome again, and of course the "tension" in the work place!!
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Reviewed By: cat happy:) On: June 19, 2007 15:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cat happy very happy. This is a very good story. I don't think that it si going to fast. we all have to remeber that sesshomaru and keg know echother from before and for three years. she just didn't know the sensitive side of him.
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Reviewed By: Krytal234 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2007 06:42 CDT
Comment/Review:
Only one word-UPDATE.
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