| "Behind the wall" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: ScifiAmy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2007 19:30 CDT
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You took the chapter out and put a new chapter, but I'm not sure what is going on. I guess I need to read the next chapy to give you a review.
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Reviewed By: ScifiAmy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 12, 2007 19:29 CDT
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"lemon" warns the reader of potentially explicit content (sex). "Lime" indicates that the story contains only mild sexual content.
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Reviewed By: ScifiAmy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2007 20:21 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm sorry, but I feel I must critize. I hope you take it as constructive critisism. First, you need to proof read your work. Many times you use him/her he/she in the wrong context. You meant to say she but you have "he". I don't know why you had to have Inu beat up Miroku to a pulp and have Kagome watch. It was unneccessary. And after all that they wanted to get it on? You could have just had them sneek out during the night when everyone was asleep. I feel that kinda ruined the chapter for me. It started out well, but after the Miroku incident I just couldn't believe that they could get all lovey dovey. Maybe the next chapter will be better. Keep on writing, you can only get better as you go on.
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Reviewed By: ScifiAmy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2007 10:49 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was wonderful. Very heart felt. I feel the romance. Keep up the great work. Update soon.
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Reviewed By: inu 4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2007 08:47 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Update okay? i love this fic and u have to update. kikyo crying? i never thought of that before. very impressive. now update or else......NOW!!!=9
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: June 08, 2007 04:35 CDT
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very good story... i like it... hope you update soon... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: ScifiAmy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2007 21:18 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Story is comming along very well. Please don't let Kagome give in too quickly. I know we all want our lemon but after all they only just kissed for the first time and it is Kagomes first kiss. Please let them have some romance first and then maybe she will feel comfortable enough to have some fruit. Then they can enjoy some lemonade together. Keep up the wonderful work. Please UPDATE soon!!! THANKS!
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Reviewed By: Hime Jun Hi On: June 04, 2007 18:04 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I vote that she gets over it and ends up pregnant......................................
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Reviewed By: inu 4ever [MediaMiner Member] On: June 04, 2007 08:46 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Update soon and don't let kikyo scare inuyasha off okay? i hate it when she do that. aww it's sweet of inuyasha to protect kagome from miroku's eyes. plz update soon okay? i love it already. ooh by the way, sangos weapon is named Hiraikotsu
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