| "Gen'inkekka" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: Tricia1224 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2007 16:21 CDT
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I like this story just fine. I think that this part could go into a different chapter, or even side fic that is part of this story would work. You write your story how ever you want. Don't let other people pressure you into throwing chapters out that you are not happy with. If it takes you weeks or even months for you to perfect your chapters, it just makes the story worth the wait. I enjoy this story, I always look forward to your next chapter. Have a great day.
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Reviewed By: racerx33 On: September 05, 2007 21:49 CDT
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I understand your point with Lee. It is understandable. However the point of her accepting Kyuubi is in the manga even before her injury due to a transformed Naruto. If you recall in the anime as well in the manga when she was going to Suna, Naruto asks you know what's inside of me to Sakura and he tells her the Kyuubi is inside of him. In addition she tries to calm him in his transformed state thus leading to her injury and asks Yamato if he could teach her the technique he used to subdue a transformed Naruto. Then later on after defeating Hindan she almost feeds him ramen after healing his arm. Its ok with the direction you are taking with your story. Its only my opinion. Your story is definitely unique in its approach but like I said the way you portrayed her and how she reacts to Naruto bringing back Sasuke was a stretch at least for me if anything she had sympathy for Naruto and not fear, that is if you were keeping this somewhat canon. I don't know how up to date you are with the manga or even the anime but , please don't look at this as a flame it is only my opinion as with almost anything, most things are open for debate. As I said it is an interesting story and good luck with your future chapters.
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Reviewed By: racerx33 On: September 04, 2007 21:46 CDT
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Story is interesting. Kinda disappointed me when you stated Sakura hooked up with Lee. Sakura's character is a little disappointing seeing that is if you are keeping this somewhat canon, Sakura already knew about the Kyuubi and was still by Naruto's side. Good luck with the story.
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Title: that was great
Reviewed By: DemanFox [MediaMiner Member] On: August 09, 2007 18:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
that was great i can't wait to read the next chapters when you write them so please update soon so I can read what happens next.
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Reviewed By: Tricia1224 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2007 23:13 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So far this is a great story. There are some spelling and grammar problems. Overall I like the idea of the story. This story is not confusing to me. So you did a great job editing for that. Wonderful story. Write well and have a great day.
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Reviewed By: Yue no rei On: June 29, 2007 04:33 CDT
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Omg still no review for this story? O_O Well heres your first one. Its an interesting story but somewhat confusing.
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