Reviewed By: D-Reaper Originalle [MediaMiner Member] On: July 12, 2008 16:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a cute fic. I like the homey feel it had to it. Pretty decent lemon scene as well. But the style of writing took away from the quality a bit. Especially toward the beginning, it just felt unrefined. Like this was a brain storming of ideas and phrases that the author didn't bother to put in better terms before posting. It almost turned me off of this fic. But this was a good concept. Maybe a beta reader is in order. *thumbs up*
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