| "Miscalculation" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: Konoha Ninja [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2008 09:39 CDT
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Hey, a new chapter! But I have to admit it's sort of a let down to see their responses, after they'd been so lovey at the wedding. It's all a cover-up, right? ;) Update again soon, you have me very curious!
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Title: Amazing
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: December 30, 2007 17:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm so glad I decided to give this story a try (It was recommended at the DBZ fanfic salon) I love your take on Bulma and Vegeta's get together, I can't wait for the next chapter. You're characterisations were perfect, the way you depict the fiery dynamic between the two and the dialogue is fantastic!
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Title: Wonderful
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: December 30, 2007 05:58 CST
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You did a great job with your story. I can't wait to read the ending.
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Reviewed By: Dark ki [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2007 08:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you won't believe my reaction when my little e-mail alerter come on the screen with the little tray was the mail on it with his little eletrionic voice "your mail my dear." but besides that. Vegeta's reaction was different that i thought. but i guess shock and new feelings kept him in check. i never seen a lemon like that befreo. yes i have seen never have been with a female do to Frieza, or Saiyans mate for life and such. but that was funny in a different way. it was like looking into a guys first time that never even seen a computer image of a girl's parts. (i don't think there were computers like that on Freiza's ship. so i guess he fall into the list.) i missed the agruing. even the best couples fight like cats and dogs. my mother and father to this day fight once a day. and those two are so in love it makes me gag. i truly hope there is more to this. like seeing the reaction in the morning and such. i truly enjoy your story.
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Title: There's no such thing as a too long chapter...
Reviewed By: Konoha Ninja [MediaMiner Member] On: October 26, 2007 23:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is the first story I have reviewed after having read fanfics for quite a while now- congrats! Anyway, I daresay that I find myself truly intrigued. Poor Veggie, what will he do now? I LOVE the banter between B&V that you've created. When I sat here and actually laughed aloud while reading, I realized that I should tell you so. :) Another thing I appreciate about this story is that you have good grammar and sentence structure - something lacking in so many fics. It makes the story even more enjoyable to read. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. And as I already stated, no, there is no such thing as a too long chapter! Write all you want. I doubt anyone will complain. Never gonna get tired of B&V!
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Title: this deserves more reviews that it's getting
Reviewed By: Dark ki [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2007 22:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is one of my new favorites. vegeta is so in character it's scary. now either Vegeta is going to get mad and reck the place. going to storm off slightly recking the place. or going to stand there like why did you do that. or even start to kiss back and do then do something from above. ^.^ . . . . did i mention this is one of my new favorites? because it is.
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Reviewed By: Dark ki [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2007 22:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
what's this a b/v writer. i thought they when all to g/v's. that's all i ever see anymore. i have seen bulma getting vegeta to do something like this but i still like your story. their little word spars made me laugh because i'm sure that is what they would have said. either are willing to back down and that's why they are good for each other. i love to see more chapters from ya. but i can wait. there is no rushing writing. believe me i know. bye now.
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Reviewed By: Veggie_Luva_101 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2007 21:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i totally agree with eshfemme! this fic is totally awesome and a great read! i can't wait for the next update! oh, and i know what you mean when it comes to updating - it usually takes me months to gain the attention span to do it ^_^' but, i plan to follow your example of trying to update faster and replace old and bad habits with new and better ones ^_^! Anywayz, update soon please - i'll be looking forward to it ^_~! ~Vegeta's Mate and Lover for Life, Veggie_Luva_101
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Reviewed By: eshfemme [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2007 11:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I never get tired of BVs! Although yes, this is probably the nth reiteration of what BV's 3 years could have been like, your fic is shaping up to be an interesting read. The greatest service (and disservice) Akira Toriyama has ever done for the DBZ fandom is his habit of doing time skips because it allows us to endlessly speculate as to what happened during that period. I really like the idea of the training-obsessed monkish Vegeta finally falling to the feminine wiles of the more experienced Bulma. Because although sex god Vegeta is always fun, just based on how obsessed all the strong fighters are with fighting and training on DBZ (Goku included), sometimes I think it can be more accurate to think that Saiyans are clueless about that aspect of life until some aggressive woman shows up and shoves it in their faces. So, a really great start. I can't wait to read more!
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