Reviewed By: MrsCavary James [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2009 12:04 CDT
Comment/Review:
there is an instance in your chapter for the rest OF the night that you describe hagrid as big of stomach or something like that you could use the word rotund wich means the same thing jus alittle more sophisticated...other wise this is a fantastic story so far and i enjoy it eminsely
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