| "Rythm of the Heart" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Title: From Tomoko
Reviewed By: HOWL_TO_THE_DARKMOON [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2007 15:20 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hi Gurl! I luve your stories! This is Tomoko BTW, in case you don't know who ur bff is!! Anyways, r u ready to go back to school? i am!! wait...no...yes...no...I'm confues @-@!!! The teachers i meet are scary! plz don't make me go back there!!! So i'll see ya in the hallways, luch, and on the bus!!! love ya stories and keep writting! For the people who are reading this, HOWL_TO_THE_DARKMOON is a totally cool person! *cough*NOT*cough* JK!!! though her stories have big words and everything, and somethimes bad spelling, her stories make you want to AWWWWW!!! Just keep reading her stories!! :) LYLAS, Tomoko Omichi
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Reviewed By: Alliecoolgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2007 22:56 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please continue I want to read about kagome Chewing Inuyasha out over the car crash!! Please continue!!!!
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Reviewed By: Alliecoolgirl [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2007 02:07 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG How can you stop your story there? I love it so far please keep it up! I can't wait to read what Kagome will say to Inuyasha(or whatever you decide to name that guy in your story). I bet it will be hilarious!!!!!
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Reviewed By: miley [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2007 18:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
mabye you should make Kagome faint in chapter four right when shes all up in Inuyashas face and argueing with him about the car accident.She should faint because of her head injury.and land in Inuyashas arms.Then Sango+Inuyasha+Miroku(Miroku is the black haired guy that is Inuyasha's friend right?)wonder whats wrong.Miroku says it might be because of her injury from the accident.He also says that he noticed her head bleeding back there.Inuyasha feels guilty.Sango suggests that they take Kagome to Kagome's home since no one is gonna be home until later on because of the theater.Since Sango didnt bring her license she suggests they should all bring Kagome home in her jeep.Inuyasha drives and notices how pretty Kagome is.He feels even more giulty.They get there n carry an unconcsios Kagome in her empty house.Kagome sleeps through the night.Inuyasha+Miroku+Sango walk to Sangos house since its around the corner from Kagomes.Sangos dad is asleep.Inuyasha+Miroku wait outside.Sango sneaks by her dad n gets her licsense.she drives Inuyasha+Miroku back to the parking lot of The Fizz.They see Inuyashas car.Miroku gives Sango his phone number.Inuyasha gives Sango his phone number and tells her to give it to Kagome.Inuyasha+Miroku get in Inuyashas car and say bye to Sango.They go home.Sango goes home.Inuyasha still feels giulty.n add a part where Miroku acts like a pervert n gropes Sangos ass.like that idea?feel free to use it.K?just trying 2 help.I like ur new chapteS.THANK U!!!!!!THANK U!!!!!!THANK U!!!!!!THANK U!!!!!!PLEEZ UPDATE SOON!!!!bye.miley^_^
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Reviewed By: miley [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2007 21:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A WHOLE MONTH!DAMMIT!i liked it soooo much!you HAVE to update sooner.like a week or something.and when is inuyasha gonna be in the story?im glad you made the chapter longer.it was kinda short at first.P.L.E.A.S.E.(O.N.E.G.A.I.) consider what im saying!(ledszives)
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