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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: July 31, 2007 14:53 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
like it so far... wonder what happens next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: AnimePrincessInuLover [MediaMiner Member] On: July 13, 2007 22:55 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You'r fic is going pretty good. I liked reading it alot. PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!! CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!!! YOU ROCK!
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Reviewed By: Precious [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2007 09:52 CDT
Comment/Review:
Oh and I meant to tell you when you repost please put spaces in between the paragraphs, dialouge, and etc. It is hard to read when they are so close together. Just take the time to hit enter. For some reasone double spacing a whatnot doesn't work out so great in the end. Sorry for taking up two review spots and about any spelling erros on my part. I have yet to achieve Grammar Goddess status.
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Reviewed By: Precious [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2007 09:47 CDT
Comment/Review:
Okay I will give you the hard hitting facts in this review. Be assured I am not trying to be mean spirited even if it sounds that way. As of right now the way you have been writing this story is the reason you only have one reviewer. The chapter lenghts, yikes. The fact that you update everyday is the reason you have the amount of views that you do. The plot is fine. It's been done before yes but it is a popular storyline and if done properly people love it. I just don't understand why you are selling yourself short. So much more can be done with the chapters than what you are doing with them. I stopped reading after Chapter 3 because you wasted all creative points in it. You basically said, We had lunch, Sango didn't come. I found out he is great to be around. Let's go back to work! WTF? What happened to him accusing her of tricking him into a date when Sango didn't come? Why did Sango cancel? Where was the actual conversation they (Kagome/Sango and/or Inuyasha/Kagome) had? Where is the resturant exactly? What does this office that they will be spending so much time in look like? Why does she find him burping songs amusing? Do you see where I am going? It's not that your story is bad, it could be really good. You just aren't putting much into it. I know it is hard to create. I don't assume to be the best at it but it doesn't feel like you are trying thus people don't bother to review. They think you aren't trying so they aren't going to respond. They glance at it to see where your plot is going but if you want real feedback you are going to have to do some major overhauling on this story. I wish you good luck and hope that you understand what I am trying to say.
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Reviewed By: miley [MediaMiner Member] On: June 24, 2007 21:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
arigatou!update soon onegai.
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Reviewed By: miley [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2007 17:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
not bad.please update soon.
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Reviewed By: miley [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2007 15:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
um Oo0ok.update soon.
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Reviewed By: miley [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2007 13:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i enjoyed it.your a good writer.please update soon.
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2007 13:17 CDT
Comment/Review:
really interesting so far... hope you update soon... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: miley [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2007 17:12 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it was a good start.was a bit short.anyways update soon.
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