| "Tsubasa: Revolutions" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: Inuyasha_SIT [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2008 01:23 CDT
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Finally, a bit of luck for our dear Fay-san. It sounds as though Kurogane doesn't remember anything that happened since having his soul sucked out. (Although, if he did remember, it would have been entertaining to us at least :P) This is such an amazing fic. I'm excitedly awaiting the next chapter. Though, I'll definately be patient. I don't want to become spoiled after that incredible posting.
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Reviewed By: Inuyasha_SIT [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2008 01:07 CDT
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It makes me insanely happy to see Fay fight. I wonder why Sarus can't feel the feather though. Great cliffy! I just hope that the first words of the next chapter aren't going to tell me that when the sun rose, nothing happened... ;)
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Reviewed By: Inuyasha_SIT [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2008 00:51 CDT
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Ahah! I figured that the twin Dragons probably wouldn't be the two kings. Poor Fay. Can't the guy ever catch a break? :)
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Reviewed By: Inuyasha_SIT [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2008 00:34 CDT
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One question: How is Kurogane able to understand what Fay is saying now? I assume that it is part of what Werra did to him, but that is a little difficult for me to see, as Werra didn't understand Kurogane's language either to be able to translate.
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Reviewed By: Inuyasha_SIT [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2008 00:19 CDT
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Woah. Though I can't say it was unexpected, I can say I didn't expect it so soon. That was very powerful. Poor Fay.
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Reviewed By: Inuyasha_SIT [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2008 00:04 CDT
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Oh, wow. Very hot. I'm not exactly sure why, but I really like it that you don't write out any of the actions, only Fay's reactions to them. I think it makes it seem all the more intimate. Great chapter. Oh, and by the way, after re-reading my last review. I realized it sounds kind of snarky when I said great job just after talking about the soldiers. I didn't mean it that way. There was supposed to be a new paragraph there, I just forgot that MediaMiner's review section doesn't let you show paragraph breaks. Sorry about that.
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Reviewed By: Inuyasha_SIT [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2008 23:43 CDT
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Oh. My. Gosh! I send one review, and the next day am greeted with a mass of chapters! That's...it's...I...You...I'm in such a blissfully shocked state, I'm incoherent! Instead of reading the chapters and leaving one review, I wanted to be able to give each of your chapters the attention they deserve. Therefore, I'm going to leave you a review after each one. ^-^ Just like the rest of your story, I loved this chapter. The fact that it is told in first person from Fay's perspective is great. It could have turned out corney and childish, but you've managed to maintain the serious nature of this story and keep Fay very IC. It is a testament to your writing ability. If I had to make one critique about this chapter, it would be about the end. You introduced two rather imposing-sounding guards to keep Fay from going up the stairs, but they seemed to dissappear when he went down them again. Great work. Now I'm off to read the rest.
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Reviewed By: Inuyasha_SIT [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2008 02:04 CDT
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*sniffle* It's been almost a year and a month since your last update. As much as it is likely that you have abandoned this fic, I sincerly hope not. Please, please, please continue this. I really like this story and have been dying to read the next chapter(s) for a very long time now.
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