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| "Potions Accident" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: RavenArianaSnape On: September 18, 2009 22:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
alright you seriously need to work on your detail work... and not to be rude, but its called paragraphs
| Title: lame story
Reviewed By: lame story On: November 24, 2007 08:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
what?that sucks.
| Reviewed By: Keesah On: September 25, 2007 17:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
The reason for the low style of writing score is because there is no style. It's just a whole bunch of sentences. You need more detail and more explanations. You also need to make paragraphs, not one huge paragraph. Obviously, low Spell & Grammar score is because there are plenty of mistakes that need to be corrected. You need a good beta-reader/proofreader who can correct everything for you. Average amount of orginality because I have seen a plot similar to this, but written better, I believe. Though Dumbledore was not potrayed as Evil/Cold/Uncaring!Dumbledore. For me, there is a low enjoyment factor because I need correct spelling, grammar, etc. Well, I hope you do take heed to my advice. Good luck with your story.
| Title: potions accedent!
Reviewed By: xXEMO_GRILXx On: July 18, 2007 12:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really liked it. thought it was so funny that draco gave snape to harry for a xmas present, very romantic, i like it XxX
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