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| "All for naruto, Naruto for all" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: To: Author-san,
Reviewed By: LinaelAeonsky [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2011 20:41 EDT
Comment/Review:
Hey. . . I liked this one, being a fellow yaoi fan. *winks* So, just want to state about those little words/apostrophes that seems to be missing- like this one: You typed:{Damn Sakura for Buying that annoying thing. I'm not late not like Sensei she should have given it to him not me.} It should be like: [Damn Sakura for buying that annoying thing. I'm not late- not like Sensei. She should have given it to him, not to me. ]It makes more sense, doesn't it? I think it would be more helpful for the reader to see the missing parts so as not to distract them. It kind of happened to me. figuring it out, even for a second, is enough to cut the flow or rhythm of the story. Please, don't take it as an insult. As a reader, I think criticism can help more on your writing, right.? So, thank you for the story. . . . ~Linael | Reviewed By: Fuuko-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2009 11:15 EST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this one! keep writing!
| Title: awww
Reviewed By: KaitouRyuki [MediaMiner Member] On: September 18, 2009 00:12 EDT
Comment/Review:
Hope you can update it soon. It looks like a good story to read
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