| "YOU ARE THE SLAVE^^" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] |
Reviewed By: itachi-sama93 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2008 19:24 CDT
Comment/Review:
OMG!!! I love this fic!!! Please continue,pretty please!!! ^_^
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Title: hey
Reviewed By: kirara_sango [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2007 23:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
"right in front of Sasuke just a few inches away from Sasuke" you used Sasuke's name to much in that sentence! it didnt make any sence! good story so far but you need to check your spelling! you had a lot of errors! continue the story just have someone overlook the chapter before you post!
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