Reviewed By: kuriqa [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2010 01:52 CST
Comment/Review:
woooow this fic managed to survive a two year draught, now that's what i call worth reading... at first the style it was written in was rather poor, almost to the point i didn't want to continue reading, but after that two year skip you got a lot better, the writing became fuller and much much more descriptive, which is usually prefered. and the semi-plot on this is really nice... yes parts could have been better written but that's mostly in the beginning part, like how 'suddenly' they were all three lovers, instead of them working into it, it would have been nice to see how those three came to be together, but this also works so you only have to get rei to be with them. and rei being in a coma and amnesia was a totally unexpected thing! but it was really well done! also, i love your OC's they aren't mary sues and they aren't annoying! i adore luka and karsen is great too! even that one chick who treid to break them up was ok, cuz i know she's supposed to be hated, that was the point of her, but i found her more amusing than anything... stupid wench > > i hope it doesn't take you another two years to add to this fic ~K p.s. if you want to reply to this my e-mail is kuriqa@yahoo.com
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