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| "Scandalous Vixen" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: More more we want more
Reviewed By: pahhardin [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2007 16:53 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I want to see more on this story. I would really like to see this go a bit longer. What if Rin ends up pregnant after this one night? And how long before Sesshy realized it's Rin and how does he confront her about it? This story has a WHOLE LOT of potential. Please keep up the good work.
| Reviewed By: the_cactusalien [MediaMiner Member] On: July 31, 2007 14:26 CDT
Comment/Review:
i`d say that you need to add a little more punctuation and, if possible, more space between paragraphs so everything isn`t so squished together (hurts the eyes, presonally speaking) . but overall, that was good. you`ve got a knack for writing lemons, i can already tell. and that alone hooks me in already. LOL. can`t wait for the next chapter (;
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