| "Twilight Happenings" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: Irvin Z. Martinez On: March 22, 2008 22:19 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well I think you put it very well in your author's note. This fic was rather vauge when it came right down to it. Either way I think I know how these two are connected...reincarnation right? Well that's my theory anyway. Overall this story did lag a bit when it came to plot and action...in complete honesty I found it somewhat boring seeing as the main characters didn't interact throughout...except in their dreams. Also there wasn't really much a plot except that there were two boys that were dreaming with each other. The description factor was still in play though so that won you some points...but don't worry your creativity is not affected by this at all! Great job!
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Reviewed By: Irvin Z. Martinez On: March 22, 2008 22:11 CDT
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I feel kinda sad for Ash with that deadbeat father of his. Of course Lance is a actually much worse on so many levels. I was watching this documentary on Mother Teresa last night and she said that a lonely person suffers much more than a hungry person. ...Oh gosh no I'm ranting! Uhhh! I feel bad now. But anyway I really would like to see what their connection is. I stil have yet to see it. Do they even go to the same school?
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Reviewed By: Irvin Z. Martinez On: March 22, 2008 22:05 CDT
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Lol I see that your university made a comeo appearance in this chapter. Way to keep this fic realistic. What I still don't understand is why the two 'real boys' as I call them are having dreams with each other. Guess I'll find out soon enough.
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Reviewed By: Irvin Z. Martinez On: March 22, 2008 21:58 CDT
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So are you using their Japanese names when they're in the real world. So is this Waturaba or whatever his name is Lance after all. I mean I know Satoshi means Ash in Japanese...but....ahh! Even I'm confusing myself! Whatever great chapter!
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Reviewed By: Irvin Z. Martinez On: March 22, 2008 21:54 CDT
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So Lance and Ash live in our world. Or is that other guy you mentioned even Lance at all? Ash goes to a private school? LOL!
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