Title: Chapter 3 Reviewed By:Phoenix Hoshika [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2007 04:50 CST Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 8 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10 Overall Rating: 9 of 10
Comment/Review: This chapter seemed a bit rocky compared to the first two, but I L.O.V.E.Ded your action descriptions. You really know how to write out a battle scene. One little mistake though when it was all said and done with; "It was me defeated a whole bunch of Heartless!"
Reviewed By:Phoenix Hoshika [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2007 03:06 CST Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review: Riku is getting on my nerves already and he's only said about three lines! That aside- When did Sora force or beg him to come along? There were a few mistakes grammar wise which include a small break from the story being told in first person when Sora was handed his last special item but other than that pretty solid writing. I like how it's going so far so keep up the good work!
