| "Once more into thr breach" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2008 12:00 CDT
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Hmmm, fun. Still, I didn't realize that with gaining all of Kyuubi's power that Naruto became a demon himself. Kind of an overused plot device, but a good one. Plus, the hot sex is never a bad thing, heh. Continue to update, ja ne.
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Reviewed By: RyomaSama [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2007 02:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I must say i love your idea. It is very original unlike most fics. I really enjoy your story and cant wait for you to update. Keep up the good work.
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Title: Rock on
Reviewed By: KnightStriker [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2007 02:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excelllent chapter in an excellent. Once Tsukiyo learns Naruto is a demon will she ask to be made one also? as for the pairing I only have one question male or female or hem?
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2007 01:03 CDT
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I love the story I like even more since she won`t be paired up with Sasuke but I also hope she isn`t paired up with either Itachi or Gaara why I said Gaara i`m not sure but I just don`t think that would be a good pairring heck not even Neji since itkinda seems he only cares about himself I think Lee might make a god pair oh well it is up to you so please update soon and keep up the great work
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Reviewed By: Sippio On: August 30, 2007 01:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was either posted wrong and lost formating or you had issues typing.... SO after copying the chapter to word I have redone the spacing then to my surpise found a number of errors. Mostly you doubled up on words or names and a few place "f" replaced the ' mark. I have a saved edited version now. If you wish I can send you my copy of the editing. All I did was fix spelling and delete the double words. leave a review here on your own story if you wish for my to email you the edited copy I have.
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2007 00:31 CDT
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I really really like this story and I like it eve more when you said she wouldn`t be paired up with Sasuke well I ate to say it but I have two more ppl I hope she doesn`t get paired up with and they are Itachi and Gaara oh and another thing I hate to say is because it will sound like I am complaining and I am sorry about that but this chapter was good but it was bunched up other than that this was a great chapter and sorry for complaining ok well please update soon and keep up the great work
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Reviewed By: Shinigami24 On: August 29, 2007 20:05 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*whistles* So Ino and Tsukiyo are sisters, eh? that's good? What about Shibi Aburname? I didn't see him in the previous chapter. I might not know much about him, but he's the stoic type. And his son Shino never was mean/cruel to Naruto. I think the same would apply here ot Tsukiyo...I cannot see the Aburames approving of rape...PLEASE have Tsukiyo and Sakura remain friends when they get to the Academy and meet up with Sasuke! I doubt Tsukiyo will go crazy over Sasuke like the majority of the girls do! Please have Tsukiyo and Hinata be friends!
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Reviewed By: Sippio On: August 23, 2007 16:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love it hope to see more of this and realy like how you have the story set up
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2007 10:45 CDT
Comment/Review:
So far I really really like this story I wold like it even more if you don`t pair her up with that damn Sasuke Uchiha and I wouldn`t don`t ppl will be begging you to pair her up with Sasuke hell I don`t know who you should pair her up with I would say anybody but Sasuke,Itachi,Gaara and Kiba the others ok lol hell pair her up with Haku it can kinda be like your other story but Haku actually gets to stay as a guy who kinda looks like a girl lol but thats just my opinion on who you should pair her up with and like I said please not with Sasuke or the other girls I named please anyways keep up the great work and please update soon
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Reviewed By: spiritwolf30 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2007 18:29 CDT
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Well to tell you the truth at first I didn`t like this story but until I finished reading it I started to think it might be a good story it really really sucks that now Naruto it trapped inside her mind so he has no body of his own oh well please update soon and I hope that your going to update your other story anyways keep up the good work
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