| "And the Other Is Getting It" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Rick O'Connor On: March 06, 2008 16:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey this was really good i enjoyed it alot better than the norm of robin star fics if u wrtie a sequel let me kno cuz i wanted 2 keep on readin more
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Reviewed By: Chaoswizkid [MediaMiner Member] On: December 24, 2007 01:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was a very good piece. Your vocabulary, your style, and everything was really, really good. The only problem I see is that it's hard to follow that Robin wakes up as if from a dream. It seems more like he answers her and suddenly he's in the bathroom and running to Raven in the hall and no one's quite sure what happened. Definately had to do a double-take on that one. Maybe put some emphasis on the changing of scenery. Otherwise, truly excellent. Hope to see more.
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Reviewed By: ARedRoseForYou [MediaMiner Member] On: September 22, 2007 23:07 CDT
Comment/Review:
it was all right. too much dialogue though. i agree with the first reviewer. dont show off your advanced vocabulary, just write.
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Reviewed By: heyday451 On: September 01, 2007 09:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
awesome story man. I love the idea, Raven's a bit OOC but I'll let that one go as she kind of has to be in a lemon. You're trying a bit too hard with the flowery language and fancy adjectives, it's beginning to detract from the story. Sometimes simple language is better. Don't show off how many big words you know, just write a good story.
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