Title: this is great!
Reviewed By: meetALEX [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2007 07:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked this! i'm surprised that you didn't get any reviews :( i hope you publish/ed this on fanfiction.net so that you could get a larger audience there. this was really great. i loved the whole himura family here. kenji's sooo cute without all that hatred against kenshin which is most usually shown or used in fics. he was sooo cute. thanks for the KK moments too. so sweet. i wanted to just say that maybe you could change the "Mother" into "Mommy" in the second chapter just to show consistency in kenji's language & thinking. it was on this part... "Kenji raced into the dojo to find Mommy. Mommy always took such good care of Daddy. Maybe, just maybe, if she could go to him in time, Mother could save Daddy." really great job ^_^ i hope more will read and review. ja!
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