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| "A Decade Of Waiting" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: hnnn
Reviewed By: nikki coley On: January 29, 2008 20:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked your idea for this story. The only thing I would want you to change was how you made it so short. I don't know about anyone else but it just anoyys me when things happen really fast. The story just ended too quickly. However, I did love the story line. It's like there are never any stories where Sessh accidentaly hurts Rin. It's always someone else hurting her so I liked the charge. Not that I like him hurting her or anything, no no, nothinng like that! It's just that if he were to hurt her then you know he would be upset with himself- where in other stories minor things happen and the auther makes sessh sad about it but in the back of your mind you're thinking 'he might get a little out of sorts but this is just OOC!' Great job though! I could never dream of writing a full story. I can never think of an ending. I'm more artisticly talented if ya' know what I mean.
| Reviewed By: Ethereal Siren [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2007 00:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice. I don't have a problem with any of Rin's behavior, although I can't be sure if Sesshoumaru would react this way. I think it is possible, but it is hard to tell. I think that he would get her help. if she was hurt, but I don't know if he would have mad such a mistake in the first place. I don't know if it was covered or not in cannon, but I am pretty sure he has control over his actions and ability to recognize others in his true form. The lesser question on Sesshoumaru's behavior is if he would leave her behind... I really don't know if he would or not, but really it doesn't matter. It is a good story regardless of who the people are. That's the great thing about fan fiction. You can write a little story like this without having to explain that Sess is a dog demon and what that is and that the blackhaired dogeared boy is just like his dad who doesn't even have a part in the story. We can build on these established realities to tell a simple story that would otherwise take chapters and chapters of tedious explaining.
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