Title: Review
Reviewed By: Narakulover77 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 22, 2007 19:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
While I enjoy reading Bleach fan fics, what I don't like is that you quoted the first part of the episode basically word for word as the begining of your story. If we as readers wanted this we would be watching the show or reading the magna. There is no disclaimer, in which every story should have one if it deals with copy written characters. Most of your proper nouns like names don't have captial letters. You rushed the sex part a bit too much. It seemed boring. Try to stretch it out next time. I believe with proof reading and corrections this one shot has a great deal of promise. I hope you don't take this as a flame because it isn't. I am just offering advice from one author to another. I don't have my works up here yet but I have faith that you will improve in time, everyone does.
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