| "Keitaro and Motoko Love Story" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Title: Not too bad...
Reviewed By: Vassago-Toxicity [MediaMiner Member] On: February 19, 2009 20:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
It definitely could have been a lot worse in spelling and grammar. However, it also wasn't good. Get a beta-reader and/or proof-reader. The words keep changing tense and it gets really confusing. It's mostly original, and the style of writing by itself isn't too bad. On the other hand, the story has barely any flow and there are no breaks to tell when it changes scenes. I enjoyed reading it, but the bad grammar and barely existent flow dampened my enjoyment of the story a lot.
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Reviewed By: Korisovra [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2008 01:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Seriously........You really need to pick up a Thesaurus. The entire chapter has absolutely no flow whatsoever. "This happened," and then "This happened." Combine your sentences, find ways to bring it all together and give each paragraph the sense that it actually can all be integrated seamlessly. And if you don't have it.......purchase spellcheck, hmmmm?
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Reviewed By: GrayBear32 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2008 13:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
The way your story reads it sounds like english is a second language to you. you need to work on your word suffix such as useing helped instead of just help. and been instead of being keep trying though and you will get it. I still cannot spell to save my life. that god for grammer and spellcheck.
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Title: Ouch
Reviewed By: Terdwilicker [MediaMiner Member] On: December 12, 2007 20:21 CST
Comment/Review:
Seconded. Your summary description was an assault on the English language. Additionally, Keitaro met Motoko on the way home from prep school right after getting punched by Naru, so its more a matter of reaction to the event rather than "if".
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Reviewed By: Spartan429 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 31, 2007 21:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dude, you really need to work on grammer and spelling. I just barely managed to understand what was going on.
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