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| "Wings of the Night" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] | Reviewed By: flying chrissy [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2011 17:56 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cool story!! Look forward to the next update. :) :) | Reviewed By: Princess of dobermans [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2009 10:11 EST
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DAMN that was a long writers block. please update soon. And is there any Gargoyle action?
| Reviewed By: katrinadax [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2009 23:37 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow!! This story is great! I especially like how Dylan refers to New York as "home" at the end. I look forward to reading the next chapter!
| Reviewed By: Vilkath [MediaMiner Member] On: February 24, 2009 05:23 EST
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Well on one hand I am glad to see this fic was not abandoned, on the other I almost think it would been better off. This chapter is pure summization with no real action.. and it copmletely ignored harry made Dylan into the hero and went on and on about his life. Not mention basicaly following HP canon and totaly ignoring Harry's life in New York. I am rather disapointed at the path this story took and while I suppose it is better then nothing I can't help but feel the story died with this chapter. It just was not as good as the first chapter, it took an entirely different point of view and it ignored the important people from the first chapter. And Dylan having happy reunion with Harry and all people at the castle was just so sappy and unbelievable. Big emotional momements like that are thing that really need to be written out not smashed into two or three lines of 'oh and they all lived happily ever after' type of deal. I think more then anything it's like the author forgot what they were doing over the long wait and basicaly wrote a whole new story idea from the other twins perspective, a rushed one at that.
| Reviewed By: Saris On: March 15, 2008 04:30 EDT
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nicely done with the story, hope to see another chapter soon.
| Reviewed By: Vilkath [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2008 20:04 EDT
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Interesting idea so far, like you said there is a pretty anoying trend in Harry's sibling is either named the Boy who lived, or actualy is and then Harry is neglected. Usualy it happens instantly and turns into James or Lily actualy hitting Harry, treating him as bad as most stories have the Dursley's. I love your idea because it always struck me odd Lily would do this, a mother who would die for a child traditionaly suddenly becoming a neglectful mother, even abusive. I could understand the fame getting to their head to some degree, but there is almost never any grace period, it's instant changes most the time. I have to say your story is really intersting and I wonder where it will be going. Will Harry go to some magic school? Will he go to hogwarts? I can't see Lily agreeing to it, not as long as Dumbledoor is in office. He was the driving force behind James betrayl, the man who told the world Dylan was the boy who lived, tried get Harry with the dursley's etc. I just can't imagine her letting her son go to him 9 months of the year to be brainwashed into the british wizarding worlds prejudices. That leaves us what will happen? Will you focus more on the Gargoyles plot, the HP plot, or something completely new?
| Title: wings of the night
Reviewed By: sparky95 On: December 08, 2007 17:50 EST
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This story is joy to read. I love everything about it. I like to see the years as harry and willow grow up together with a baby brother or sister if you let puck and lily have kid of their own. It should be fun to see what happen when puck/owen meets james potter. There is no way james could ever out prank puck. I like to see if lily will meet wizards and witchs in new york. I like to see if james potter will re-married and have other kids in the future. I think harry is the real boy who lived and people just think his brother is. Will harry be going to hogwarts or different magic school? I like to see more of the Gargoyles in the next chapther because the were bearly in this chapther. If harry goes to hogwarts I think he get into Slytherin and prove to people that it is not the house of evil. I feel sorry for Dylan because of his father's actions he will grow up not knowing how his real mother is like and I also belive that when truth comes out that he is not the boy who lived his father might be cold to him. He also never get to learn magic like his brother will at young age. He will never know if his friends are true or are only his friend because he is the boy who lived. Maybe remus be the only one will truly love him for the way he is growing up. If you think about it it is very sad. I think the house elfs know about Avalon more than the wand users do because their magic is kind of like the magic on Avalon and when they meet harry along with family their will treat them with honor. This just fun guessing on my part but I have no idea how you plan to have this play out. I can only hope that you update soon and I along with others don't have to wait for months to see what comes next. Please keep up the good work.
| Reviewed By: ThatOneGirl On: November 15, 2007 16:54 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi im your new reader and I was reading this a couple days ago and must say that this is my favorite of your stories. please continue your amazing-ness your friend ThatOneGirl
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: November 15, 2007 15:28 EST
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Hmmm, nice to see another story, on a series I love, but see so little fanfics for. Frankly, I agree with your idea about Lily though, a mother who truly loves her child would ALWAYS find the time for both her children, and would never abandon them both, and she would try to put as much time with both her children, both the boy who lived, and the other child, as it so often ends up. No parent should ever abandon their child, they have to be truly messed up to do somethign like that. Anyway, continue to update this story, the concept's great, and I always did love puck. Question is, is Willow gonna be an OC, or Willow from Buffy-verse? If the later, please don't make Lilly give her up, Willow is a cool character in Buffy, and doesn't deserve the same thing that happened to Harry. Also, O don't remember what disease Renard had, I think it mighta been some kind of cancer, like bone cancer or something. Anyway, keep on updating, this story is getting interesting. Ja ne.
| Reviewed By: PaigeSitton On: November 09, 2007 22:57 EST
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This is really good, hurry and continue!
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