Title: Great Job Reviewed By:gravilove19 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 25, 2007 23:38 CST Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 7 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10 Overall Rating: 8 of 10
Comment/Review: I has a really interesting plot. The only problem is being able to tell when the talking/thoughts end and where the desciption begins. I would suggest adding quotes to where talking is occuring and putting a new line for each speech block. for example: "Your parents are here Shuichi" Eiri said. He knew their smiles were fake etc. I hope this helped a little bit ^.^ I can't wait to see what you do next.
