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| "Change of Hands" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: A Fairy Tale
Reviewed By: demonmiko82 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2009 21:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The first chapter was really good, and it also feels good to be able to say that I have read your story. The begging is interesting, pulling you in right at the start, but I have to say Yoko seems more light hearted then he seemes to be made out. They are always saying that Yoko is cold and calculating, always spending time plotting out what to do next or what ever. Maybe it's Korama that you are thinking of, him being the fun peace maker (unless fighting or something pertaining to such) and all. But I highly doubt that everyone else is as OCD about this as I am, so I'd say that you are in the clear.
| Title: hmmm....
Reviewed By: Lady Laori [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2008 12:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I would consider this a rather well written fan fiction. Granted it would make for a better (and easier) read if it was proofread and all typos fixed. It would also be more helpful to the reader if a new paragraph was started every time someone different started talking/thinking. Annoying yes, but all great authors do adhere to the fundamental basics of writing fiction and the like. By no means is this meant to be a flame. Just some positive helpful criticism. If you have any question about this comment, please contact me.
| Reviewed By: Clumsy Kitten (too lazy to log in xD) On: November 29, 2007 16:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woooooooo! This story rocks out loud! -dances- i wanna read more! So pleaaaase hurry up! I love the characters, the plot and umm...everything! Squee! Everyone should read this! -is talking to the people that read w/o reviewing- -wields a Death Note-
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