Title: Hmn.
Reviewed By: C y a n i d e [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2007 10:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
well i noticed a lot of grammar mistakes. it is a good story, but yeah, the grammar kind of takes away from it. i know you dont like it when i correct you when youre writing your stories, but i really hink it would be a good idea for someone to read your stuff before you submit it. the paragraphs are longer which is good, but you kind of get repetitive with the teachers, and your use of vocabulary. I like your narrative, it's improved a lot, and your story is really good. vampires have been done before though, so eh. i do like how youve incorperated different legends into the story, but id like to point out that vampires do not sleep in coffins buried in the ground. theyre usually in basements or dark places, but NOT in the ground, lol. id know because im a vampire lover, right? haha over all, really good job so far. keep it up, do your best, and i look forward to another update~ :]
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