| "Flowers of Occultism" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Title: XD
Reviewed By: Edward.Cujo On: January 08, 2009 16:17 CST
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Yay, good job, Jazzy! XD *Hugs Will* He's about as OCD in the kitchen as I am about grammar. =P Oh, by the way, you didn't put what 'ne' meant in the Author's Note. Were you planning to do that...? (I know what it means, but most people aren't Japanese freaks like us.) And now that Izzy has sat in front of the screen, I'm going to hope this is legible. Bye! (Get chapter nine out soon!!!!!)
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Reviewed By: Mel Meiko Mei Ling [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2009 23:45 CST
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Whoooooo! Nice interactions! Will was awesome. I didn't know u liked cinnamon sugar toast! We totally have to have some sometime. Lol will and steven's spats were hilarious. I wonder what broke lol Will's "haughtiness" was awesome
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Reviewed By: -Satans Spawnishly Daughter- [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2008 17:01 CDT
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love this story! damn i made up my own accent ^_^"" i mix an slur words in ways that makes people around me in real stare at me like im some sort of alien XDD its funny update soon!
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Reviewed By: Mel Meiko Mei Ling [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2008 18:07 CDT
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Aww this was slightly sensual >=3 lol I liked it! It was a cooled down pace from all the crazy thangs that are after them. Gigo had great timing lol That was funny. And Will's response. I wanna know his secrets!!! I thought he was a vampire........ >=3 Everyone's got different accents lol Have you ever heard skreet instead of street? or skrimp instead of shrimp? lol
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Reviewed By: Mel Meiko Mei Ling [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2008 18:55 CDT
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YAY!!! ANOTHUH CHAPTUHH!!!! >=3 Steven= hotness William= gentleman, so Steven's got him beat lol Nice trick Steven pulled near the beginning >=3 That was hot. Him and Hali are really fun together
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Reviewed By: Eddieward On: February 09, 2008 19:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! Wonderful! I love the fifth chapter. Steven is awesome... Keep writing! (And don't let Emmett get a copy of it... Who knows what he'd do with it...)
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Reviewed By: triple m On: February 05, 2008 20:56 CST
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This chap had a different feel to it. It was nice that Steven got to find more out about Hali. I wonder what he saw??
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Reviewed By: Mel Meiko Mei Ling [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2007 22:34 CST
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A lot of personal and mental images and situations. This chap seemed a bit 'softer' compared to the others but kind of deep too. How the flow went from what was going on in da main char's head and how she reacted after doing plenty of thinking to the unraveling of the water and the thing. ^^ Greatness
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Reviewed By: You know whoooooooooooooooooooooooooo! On: November 15, 2007 13:55 CST
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Another wonderful chapter. You've grown so well with your writing! You're doing so well ^^ This chapter was really good.
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Reviewed By: Mellie-channnnnnnnnnnnn On: November 15, 2007 12:52 CST
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You write like a movie is playing out! Great descriptions especially in this chapter so far. It was so nice and realistic ^^ Oh but be careful what info you put in the keys or anywhere. Especially about your location. Don't want to psycho lookin around. O.o But great story so farrrrr!
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