| "Not according to plan" Reviews/Comments [ 26 ] |
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Reviewed By: DragonKitsune [MediaMiner Member] On: November 17, 2007 19:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Deffinately a keeper! lol i wanna see how Inu reacts to Kag's "not taking no shit" attitude! *grins evily
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Reviewed By: smpnst [MediaMiner Member] On: November 17, 2007 11:35 CST
Comment/Review:
I like this story, keep it up!!!
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Reviewed By: sexxiigurrll0204 On: November 17, 2007 10:42 CST
Comment/Review:
its a keeper. i really like it! keep up the good work =]
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Title: Awesome
Reviewed By: SacredMiko [MediaMiner Member] On: November 17, 2007 10:05 CST
Comment/Review:
Its a really nice so far i hope you update soon!
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Reviewed By: Leo-mae On: November 17, 2007 10:03 CST
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As a fellow author I am going to give u some constructive criticism. You can take it or leave its up to you. You have a good begining but this first chapter probably should have been a little bit longer. I think it would have been better if you dragged it out a little more and showed Inu's reaction to the whole thing. Cliff hangers are great for keeping readers interested and wanting more but they need to be used effectively and in the right place. I would have liked to see how Inu reacted so as to gain a better feel for his character. I imagine Inu as being a bit spoiled but at the same time being tired of everyone just fawing and falling all over him, I could see him as the type who would appreciate Kag for her boldness but would still be initially angry with her. It would have done you good to set the stage a little more by showing us more of Inu's character. *shrug* as I said this is just constructive criticism and u can use it how you see fit, I am looking forward to the next chapter to see how you handle everything. Good Luck with the story ok. Oh by the way you did do a lovely job at setting up Kag's character.
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Reviewed By: arizonasiren On: November 17, 2007 07:37 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good start..Can't wait for next update.
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Reviewed By: Millicent_Hellix [MediaMiner Member] On: November 17, 2007 06:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hilarious. lol to your question befor, yes its a keeper, keep writting it! Nice Kag/Inu intro, But I think its easy to get thing outa hair (other then gum), expecsually liquids. ^_^
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Title: love
Reviewed By: evanne On: November 17, 2007 02:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
sooooooooo good I cant wait to read more! so far i'm lovin' all of your stories that I've read so far keep it up and update soon :D Evanne
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2007 23:09 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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interesting story... really like it so far... so inuyasha is an actor and a jerk... kagome is a teacher... what kagome did to inuyasha he deserved it... wonder what happens next... update as soon as you can... please and thank you!
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Reviewed By: inuyasha-obsessed167 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2007 22:39 CST
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ahaha i wanna read more. i love how kagome does all this funny stuff to inuyasha in your stories.
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Reviewed By: Inulover1253 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 16, 2007 20:56 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thats funny Keep going i want to know more = ) Please update soon
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