Reviewed By: Shiroiyuki [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2008 22:10 CDT
Comment/Review:
I quite enjoyed reading this fanfiction! I don't know much about Dr. Slump (which is shameful, seeing as I'm a fan of Toriyama), so I'm not sure if Arale stayed in character or not -- but Goku sure seemed okay to me. I found your prose easy to read and entertaining, quite descriptive in places but not overly so. It was balanced nicely to be honest, and I could imagine the scenes well. There were a few places where I got hung-up a bit -- namely when Japanese words/phrases/etc. were used (N'cha bothered me but that may be because I'm not familiar with Dr. Slump), but all in all a nice one shot. My only complaint is that I wish your story was a bit longer!
|
