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| "Ordinary Heroes" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: SydMonster On: November 30, 2007 21:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ooh, I love how it's started out. Dee's so thoughtful of the people around him, I'm not suprised that he'd uptake in something so below the books but so right in the sense of morality. It's very real, I can't wait to see how it pans out. Ryo's kiss to Dee was very sweet, very optomistic. And despite how stoic Dee acts, I'm sure he's feeling optomism too. :)
| Reviewed By: Garita (eek! Why am I not signed in?) On: November 27, 2007 13:45 CST
Comment/Review:
You have me hooked, again! This was an awesome chapter - I love the way you explored Ryo's lack of knowledge. It's something to think about, eh? And you had me so mad when Ryo jumped to conclusions like that! I mean, not because you wrote it, but because it is what would have happened anyway. I really like the story... Please do not keep us hanging too long! I want, I NEED to know more!
| Reviewed By: Tobias/Rak On: November 26, 2007 21:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome start. Definitely transitions from the other story well. Looking forward to reading the next chapters. ;)
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