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| "Emancipation" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: Liesie [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2008 23:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
If I could, I'd change the Style of Writing to a 13. Really, the description is so captivating I feel like my monitor is actually displaying a movie. You're also very good at finding accutare synonyms to avoid word overuse. Your meanings are concisely conveyed without getting too wordy or repetitive. One of the drawbacks to having such brilliant descriptions when writing graphic material such as this is that the brutality of Naraku's dark purpose for visiting the spring is as vividly depicted in the reader's mind as the wind blades renting the trees; my constitution forced me to gloss over the graphic parts and continue to more sedate sections. That's not necessarily a bad thing; indeed, when blessed with such an aptitude for description, go the whole nine yards. All in all, beautiful (if gory) story. You can expect to see new reviews from me for a looong time if all the chapters flow as well as this one.
| Reviewed By: lil_one [MediaMiner Member] On: January 11, 2008 14:51 CST
Comment/Review:
wow.... its all i can say.... please update soon... this story is great!
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