| "Miscalculation" Reviews/Comments [ 52 ] |
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Title: Chapter 31
Reviewed By: 2remember [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2008 13:05 EDT
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Is it my imagination, or is Chapter 31 out of place? I mean, when did this suddenly turn into Love Hina?
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Reviewed By: WootMannen [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2008 08:12 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Damn good fic! Poor Negi (or lucky bastard...), it seems like he's going to end up with the entire class at this rate! The headmaster is prolly going to suffer a heart-attack when he finds out that Negi, one of his teachers, has Pactioed nearly his entire class and also been intimate with them! Though, I have a feeling that Negi's old man, Nagi is probably laughing his ass off somewhere... It will be VERY fun to see how the Pactio between Mana and Negi will go. He's almost as terrified of her as he is of Evangeline. Mana, Chachamaru, Kaede and Kû Fei are the ones I want to see get silver-lined cards the most. Though Chachamaru isn't Pactioed to Negi, and thus can't get a silver-line card, she DOES have a crush on him... And didn't you write in one chapter that she is "H-capable" now? Though I think Kû Fei and Mana would be the funniest. Kû Fei because she is, well, Kû Fei and Mana because... Well, because of the awkwardness. Keep up the good work! We really wanna see more of this!
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Reviewed By: Disgaea13 On: June 11, 2008 16:20 EDT
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So Mana has been 'prepared' has she? How will Eva get Negi to form a Pactio with a person he's nearly outright terrified of? Not to mention will the other girls allow it if Mana is only interested in the power up? Also won't this tip Negi and co. off more that Eva is planning something? Also how will Eva get the girls to accept Takane and Mei when they've already decided the Wings are 3-A only? So much plot in one chapter, so many questions. At any rate keep up the good work!
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Title: not so
Reviewed By: eddie_star_wars [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2008 10:52 EDT
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that's not true, negi does have a pact with eva in one of the earlier chapters, when eva takes him away and the others all fight Chachamaru.
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Reviewed By: dragon_cloud16 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2008 23:08 EDT
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At the rate this fics going, Negi's going to have a Pactio with his entire class. Except Eva, she seems more like a puppeteer then a Ministra Magi. But still, some good chapters and I hope that the next ones will keep the spirit of the fic.
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Reviewed By: 2remember [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2008 20:10 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've really enjoyed this story! The one thing I've been wondering since I started reading it was just who has miscalculated. I'm getting the feeling it wasn't the rodent... Keep up the good work and update soon!
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Reviewed By: eddie_star_wars [MediaMiner Member] On: May 29, 2008 14:35 EDT
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i agree with seph6. what happened between asuna and kataro
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Reviewed By: dragon_cloud16 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 24, 2008 16:33 EDT
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A good chapter leaving clues to Negi and his partners along with showing more potential ones. Sayo possessing one of Chachamaru's old bodies makes sense but her gaining a pactio already came out of right field. I wonder if Zazie will follow them if Sayo shows up in her new body? Poor Negi, at this rate it seems his entire class will be his partners. His grandfather and the Headmaster will either have a heart attack or a party for getting every magi's dream. I hope the next chapter will come out soon.
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Reviewed By: un named On: May 04, 2008 00:42 EDT
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Up date soon I want to see what the older women will do. Also if Negi old friend Anya will come into this
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Reviewed By: dragon_cloud16 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2008 21:58 EDT
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I enjoy how your setting this fic up. I can't believe that the pactio's are having this much of a affect still. To see Yue and Nodoka wanting sex just proves this. I hope that you'll get the next chapters out sooner along with Legacy.
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Reviewed By: OverMaster On: April 20, 2008 09:30 EDT
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Yeah, I'm anxiously waiting for the update as well, although I'm still disappointed we didn't get to see the culmination of the Negi/Eva mating (maybe in a flashback, or in an, ahem, second encounter?).
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Reviewed By: un named On: April 20, 2008 02:17 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
waiting for update hope its soon
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Reviewed By: DKGafgar On: April 19, 2008 02:44 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good, original, and well written. I think I saw the occasional typo, but otherwise flawless. Any particular reason why it's listed as "Completed" though?
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Reviewed By: Disgaea13 On: April 08, 2008 14:53 EDT
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Good as always, can't wait for the next chapter! Though your story is very long I think it's better that way, gives the story a realistic feeling, the stories with characters just jumping into eachother's pants for no aparent reason are both a little to common and rather bland. No finesse, you know?
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Reviewed By: dragon_cloud16 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2008 15:16 EDT
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Evangeline does have a soft spot for Negi eh? At times it seems that this entire event was planned from the beginning. At the very least, Nagi wanted this to happen to Negi and to free Evangelion without doing it himself. This also gets her off his back and onto his son's. But that sounds like something that Nodoka Saotome would do. They were some good chapter and I can't wait for the next ones.
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