Reviewed By: Punkrock_grl92 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2008 09:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, I'm truley amazed at your wide vocabulary and you do an excellent job in your descriptions. I love angst and I really felt the emotion of Sango's turmoil. Though, on the other hand, I felt that the discusion between Sango and Kaede was a little long... But it had a lot of good content in it, so I wouldn't change much about it. Also, I can't really picture Sango sticking her tongue out at Kaede. There was also a point in the scene where Sango was battling the demon, where you said 'tree' three times in a row that made it sound a little bad. It was where you said, "A large humanoid youkai was growling and attempting to pry apart the trunk of an old tree. The whimpers of a terrified child emitted from a small crack at the base of the tree. `The child is in the tree! I have to save it, before the youkai can get to it.'" It just kind of sounded funny when reading, so I thought I point it out. Overall, I liked it a lot and enjoyed reading. Although I'm kind of sad that Sango is scared for life... We never really know what happens after that. I don't know if it's a good thing because you get to decide for youself what happens, or a bad thing because of the way it ends sort of open-ended... You never get to read about their wedding and stuff or if Sango heals or not. But anyways, I'm adding this story to my favs!! ^_^
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