| "New Destinies" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: Hildi_chan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 22:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok. Firstly you need some kind of beta, you misspelled a few SM terms, either take the time to look them up or have someone do that for you. Next the plot... You have a great start, there are so many possible dirrections you could go from here. Remember that the basic force driving any story lorg or short is conflict. You need to get the characters in worse and worse situations and then have them find a way out of it. The climax of the story is when the main character gets in the worst situation possible and then gets out of it. Your story started off on a negative note with the sailors betraying Usagi so you need to give the story a happy ending. Lastly is that in your fiction ids you put this as a Ronin Warrior's fic so they need to show up with in the first chapter or two (the third at most). They don't need to meet the Scouts right away, but the reader does need be introduced to them and what they are doing and how they fit in to the fic. Sorry if I come off rather harsh but I just wanted to help. I did still enjoy what you have done so far and love to read SM/GW crossovers and Ronin Warriors to also a good cross. Please don't give up on this fic. Much luck to you.
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Reviewed By: silverbells On: August 23, 2003 13:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Plz write more!!!!! IT's totally cool + I love it!! |
Reviewed By: Breann On: August 02, 2003 01:39 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
IT was cool i so tottaly can't wai for the next chapters you really tallented |
Reviewed By: moonprincess On: August 02, 2003 01:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
IT was so cool the creativity was ok i enjoyed it! |
Reviewed By: NightShadow On: March 11, 2003 18:56 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story!! The only thing I don't like about it is that you were going to have it be Quatre and Usagi but you changed it to Heero and her :( oh well. Keep up the great work and update soon!! |
Reviewed By: NightShadow On: March 11, 2003 18:55 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story!! The only thing I don't like about it is that you were going to have it be Quatre but you changed it to Heero :( oh well. Keep up the great work and update soon!! |
Reviewed By: Kuroi Doragon [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2002 12:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
good story but the current pairings are over done and please don't have Duo as Shinigami. |
