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| "The oracles" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Jaded Rose [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2003 15:12 CST
Comment/Review:
It's okay, but it could be better. Now, before I even say anymore, I'm not flaming, I'm giving contructive criticism, and these are just suggestions, so don't get all bent out of shape. I'm not trying to be rude if I'm coming off that way.
First, the spacing needs to be fixed. There should be a new paragraph every time a different person speaks.
Second, try to add more punctuation. For example ”Priestess you cannot do this you may be an elf but u are a maiden it's unseemly what
do you think your father would say”
"Priestess, you cannot do this. You may be an elf, but you are a maiden. It's unseemly. What do you think your father would say?"
Third, try to add in more detail, and don't put more than one episode on one page.
Otherwise, I guess it's okay.
Jaded Rose | Reviewed By: Stardriv [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2002 22:14 CDT
Comment/Review:
You are very dedicated to your writing, the enthusiasm shows, so keep at it! | Reviewed By: NorthStar [MediaMiner Member] On: August 15, 2002 23:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OFCOURSE YOU AINT BAD!! THIS IS REEEEEALLY COOL!! GO ON!!!
-mwah-
North Star | Reviewed By: GwendolynStarsong [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2002 20:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
i can't be that bad can I ??? |
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